Talk:Virtual Bowling/GA1

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Reviewer: ProtoDrake (talk · contribs) 14:29, 2 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this one on. Ping me if I'm not back in a few days. --ProtoDrake (talk) 14:29, 2 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@ProtoDrake:OK. So, after being out of comission without internet for nearly 4 days, i'm waiting to see what is needed to take this article into GA status :) Roberth Martinez (talk) 00:40, 7 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hi. Thanks for the ping. Here's what I spotted.

You call it a sports game in the lead, and nowhere else. Should be mentioned in Gameplay.

Done -- Roberth Martinez (talk) 15:50, 7 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

"the player participates in a series of four game matches" - Maybe delete "game" as it's a bit redundant here.

Done -- Roberth Martinez (talk) 15:50, 7 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

"Virtual Bowling was originally slated for a December 8 launch by Athena,[13] but was published on December 22 instead and was housed in an eight megabit cartridge, serving as one of the last official Japanese Virtual Boy games published alongside SD Gundam Dimension War, also released on the same day.[14][15][16][17]" - This is a bit of a run-on. Can it be split up for ease of reading?

Done -- Roberth Martinez (talk) 15:50, 7 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

"Due to being one of the last releases for Virtual Boy in Japan, coupled with a very limited run of copies produced, makes the title harder to find and more expensive than earlier Japanese releases, becoming a rare collector's item that commands high prices on the secondary game collecting market.[4][15][16][17]" - Again, mixed phrasing.