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Reviewer: Freikorp (talk · contribs) 12:14, 24 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]


  • "McCormick intended for the songs to include different musical genres" - it should probably be clarified in the lead whether this intention was ever carried out
  • I'd clarify in the lead what Circuit City is for people who don't live in the US and are unlikely to have heard of it
  • "As of August 31, 2016" - this is unusually specific considering the context, can you just simplify to "August 2016". While we're on the subject, can't you just update it to "June, 2018" as per WP:BLUE? I'm pretty sure if she released another country album we'd know about it given her profile.
  • "a campy album of duets" - whose quote is this? Is it McCormick's?
  • "She later said that she regretted not taking the offer" - I'd specify the year here
  • An exact year was not provided in the source. Here is the part on it (McCormick interrupts. You know, I was offered a chance to record an album after the series ended, but I wanted to go back to college and live a normal life.). Aoba47 (talk) 15:42, 24 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "McCormick received a record deal through brother's record label Phantom Hill in 1994" - this is the first mention of a date in this section. I'd mention at least one other date in the prose to give more context. How about whatever year The Brady Bunch ended?
  • Should you add 'pictured' after "Nicolette Larson's" in the image caption. I mention this as the caption mentions two women.
  • "McCormick sings with a "Nashville accent"" - according to whom?
  • "Lyrics from the album include: "don't bury me on the love prairie." - Just curious, is there any reason you're mentioning this? It seems really random to me, though I'm not familiar with McCormick or the Brady Bunch
  • I just thought that it might be helpful to include lyrics from the album. This is the only reliable, third-party source that I could find that does this (and they do not even say what song it is from). I removed it as it is rather trivial. Aoba47 (talk) 15:42, 24 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Just confirming - it was released as a digital download in 1995? I didn't know they had digital download that early.
  • Revised. The digital source says 1995, but it is most likely referencing the original release date. I have encountered this sort of trouble with digital sellers before ><. Aoba47 (talk) 15:42, 24 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "was rereleased as a "Circuit City Exclusive" in 2008 through Building" - what's Building? Also why is Circuit City Exclusive in quotes?
  • "was not "done the right way"" - this is interesting; can you expand on it any more than you already have? No worries if the source isn't any more specific.
  • "and told her: "Wow . . . where did you get that voice?"" - this seems a bit self-serving and unnecessary. I'd drop the quote and just leave it at "responded positively to her voice"

Looks good. will pass once issues are addressed. Freikorp (talk) 12:14, 24 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]