Talk:Zaleilah/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MaranoFan (talk · contribs) 15:23, 18 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"Written by Costi Ioniță along with band lead singer Elena Ionescu and member Omar Secada, and produced by Ioniță and Dimitriu Silviu, it was released on 16 September 2011." -- I would change this to "It was written by Costi Ioniță along with band lead singer Elena Ionescu and member Omar Secada. Produced by Ioniță and Dimitriu Silviu, it was released on 16 September 2011.'
Add a comma after Azerbaijan in the first sentence of the second paragraph.

"After being premiered on the group's website on 16 September 2011, the song was digitally made available in various countries on 7 February 2012 by Cat Music, containing several remixes alongside the original track." -- I would use the term "released" instead of "made available". Try this wording: "After being premiered on the group's website on 16 September 2011, Cat Music digitally released the song in various countries on 7 February 2012, along with several remixes."
"with a critic likening the accordion sequences to Greek composer Mikis Theodorakis's 1964 instrumental 'Zorba's Dance'" -- Remove the s after the apostrophe

"Jan Feddersen, writing for Die Tageszeitung, praised the song for its catchiness and dance nature" -- The term "dance nature" would be grammatically incorrect unless the genre is being talked about. If it is the genre, then link it to Dance music, if it is not then change the word to "danceable nature" or something like that.
Perhaps this section could be renamed to just "Reception" since it only mentions one award nomination?
"On the service's 2012 year-end chart, the track reached number ten" -- Change "ten" to "10"

"The singer subsequently "wakes up"[1] inside a skyscraper and is also seen walking on the streets and the beach of Dubai." -- The mid-sentence reference can be moved to the end of it.
"In the same year, the band also embarked on a tour in Belgium and the Netherlands." -- This sentence should only be included if Zaleilah was performed on this tour, and that should be noted in the article if it was.

A very good job with this article! I will pass it when everything is taken care of.--N Ø 15:52, 18 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@MaranoFan: Thank you for the review! I think I adressed everything... Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:32, 18 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]