Template:Did you know nominations/Dorothée Munyaneza

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 00:34, 25 December 2018 (UTC)

Dorothée Munyaneza

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• ... that Dorothée Munyaneza is a singer, actress, dancer and choreographer whose works focus on the Rwandan genocide?
  • ALT1:... that Dorothée Munyaneza left Rwanada during the Rwandan genocide and now writes plays about her experiences?

• Reviewed: Joe Kryczka (3/5)

Created by Joseph2302 (talk). Self-nominated at 16:59, 7 December 2018 (UTC).

Interesting life, on good sources, French sources accepted AGF, no copyvio obvious. I like both hooks, but would prefer a third that says that she came from Rwanda at the time, but was inspired to more than just plays. - Article: please read again and fight some duplication, London - London, or her name in several sentences in a row, which could be "she" sometimes. In lead and later: say "work" only after you said more precisely what kind of work. Here, it seems to mean "play", but could be a poem, a symphony, - see what I mean? "singer and storyteller", - is that still in the film? If general, peraps mention before getting more specific? "first solo album" - as a singer? - Finally: do we have reviews that would be worth mentioning? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 16:33, 19 December 2018 (UTC)

• Clarified the points made above. As for a hook, ALT1 kind of says that, but how about:
• ALT2: ... that Dorothée Munyaneza, who moved to London from Rwanda during the Rwandan genocide, now writes plays about her experiences? Joseph2302 (talk) 09:20, 20 December 2018 (UTC)

• Thank you. What do you think of this, to avoid repetition, and to indicate that she already wrote some, - not "is now in the process of writing her first plays"?

ALT3: ... that Dorothée Munyaneza, who moved to London as a girl because of the Rwandan genocide, has written plays about her experiences? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 10:58, 20 December 2018 (UTC)

- missing singing and dancing a bit, but hard to integrate, or could someone? - I'll watch