Template:Did you know nominations/Frederic, Count of Luna

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The result was: promoted by Carabinieri (talk) 20:06, 23 February 2013 (UTC).

Frederic, Count of Luna

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... ~~that King Martin of Aragon (pictured) wanted his grandson, Frederic of Luna, to be legitimated by the pope, but died from laughter before he could accomplish it?~~

Reviewed: 2006 Philippine Mount Everest Expedition

Created by Surtsicna (talk). Self nominated at 22:24, 22 February 2013 (UTC).

Very interesting hook. All source are offline but the one needed to verify the hook (Source 4). Size looks good, and the article was recently created. However, I don't see any mentions from a pope in the article. ComputerJA (talk) 02:29, 23 February 2013 (UTC)

That is correct. The article now mentions him. However, I would like to replace the original hook with an alternative that is more easier to understand and thus more attractive to an average reader:

ALT1: ... that King Martin of Aragon (pictured) wanted to ensure the accession of his illegitimate grandson, Frederic of Luna, but died from laughter before he could do so?

Great. This is good to go now. ComputerJA (talk) 19:28, 23 February 2013 (UTC)