User talk:Iwight
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Suggested focus
[edit]As there's already a significant amount of content in the Rebar article—not all of it critically useful—it's difficult to identify the knowledge gaps. One that I noticed is the lack of historical perspective; addressing this is probably more relevant to the class than covering innovations or corrosion. You've found a good number of sources, but consider consulting those listed under Concrete in the course bibliography, including this one:
- Mars, Roman (2013-06-07). "Rebar and the Alvord Lake Bridge". 99% Invisible. Retrieved 2017-11-11.
Elizabeth Linden Rahway (talk) 22:35, 11 November 2017 (UTC)
The update to the history section is very detailed and I am impressed with the information you have found. However it also be good to see updates to some of the other sections with less information like "Reuse and Recycling".
Additionally on the Rebar page wikipedia identified that "This article needs additional citations for verification. Please help improve this article by adding citations to reliable sources. Unsourced material may be challenged and removed." Perhaps look into a few sources to verify that the information is correct. Also all the sizes and dimensions don't have a credible source, that leads me to question "how reliable are these numbers?" Maybe it would be better to place all the technical information at the end of the page, that would only mean rearranging the sections around.
The article could also have a stronger lead section, as of now it is too short.
Amiller262 (talk) 01:58, 21 November 2017 (UTC)Amiller262
Instructor comments
[edit]You've added a good summary of the early history of reinforced concrete development. Although I generally agree with your peer reviewer's comments, many sections of the existing Rebar article are problematic and, for the purposes of this assignment, it's acceptable to focus on improving one or two of them as you've done. If you're interested in taking this a bit further, consider editing the Placing rebar section to compare modern tied or welded rebar cages to the Kahn and Hennebique systems that attempted to incorporate tensile and shear reinforcement in a single piece. Otherwise, please make a final copy edit (e.g., poor quality labor instead of "poor labor") and perhaps add a few specifics about Turner's objections to Kahn's system.
Elizabeth Linden Rahway (talk) 04:49, 28 November 2017 (UTC)