User talk:Tberli3/Wikidraft1
Cindy: Good Start
[edit]-In the first section in sentence “In other words a décollement is the lowest detachment of a fold-thrust belt.” You use detachment to describe decollement (they are the same thing!) don’t use the word you are defining in its definition. Be more descriptive.
- Add more hyperlinks, words that seem basic to you are not to the general reader (evaporate, foreland, allochthonous, etc)
-I would add a section that presents the history of decollements, as in the first time they were observed and possibly how they were interpreted prior to the idea of decollements.
-Another section could be naming specific locations that show this type of deformation and relate them to tectonic events (like the Servier-Laramide).
-Images look good!
Good but kind of sparse, I thought. I'm not sure what all to say except maybe some of the stuff could use a little fleshing out. The whole friction-wedge slope idea, for example, seems sort of stuck in there. Nice pics, though, and good citing. -John
I am going to have to agree with John about the figure and the citing, you did very well on thoise things. It is obviosly going to need some more information in each section, but then again it is only a draft. The organization of the whole page seems to be well done, but it would not hurt to add one or two more sections because three may not be enough for the final draft. Other than that I would have to say it is a pretty good draft. - Sean — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sjense2 (talk • contribs) 11:22, 24 October 2011 (UTC)
Further comments from Graeme
[edit]- It looks as if you are putting in double effort with the section headings. The style for section headings is just to use the == sign and not the triple quote as well. The triple quote bold is used to highlight the first occurrence of the topic name or the synonyms or the redirects to this article. Some how you got the double quotes around the references wikimarkup near the end of the article. " does not mean anything special, so it shows up on the page.
- I know it is tempting to just copy a citation from else where, but it means that you end up with inappropriate capitalization such as "DÉCOLLEMENT".
- For articles we don't use <big> markup tags for the subject, the manual of style has all the detail about this in more detail than you would like. Graeme Bartlett (talk) 20:25, 25 October 2011 (UTC)