Quick comments I'll do a full review later but here are two things that stand out.
"This is a list of" FLs don't begin like this.
- Done. I re-worded the lead sentence. Let me know if any others improvements could be made to the lead.
"Neil Garcia of Season 9 voluntarily left the house on Day 9 due to an urgent personal matter" "urgent personal matter" is the same phrase that is used in the source; put it in quotes. Dabomb87 (talk) 16:08, 24 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. --Another Believer (Talk) 16:19, 24 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)
- "Big Brother is an American television show where contestants " "where"-->in which
- Done.
- "The series first aired in 2000, with 10 seasons filmed as of June 2009."-->The series first aired in 2000, and 10 seasons have been filmed as of June 2009.
- Done.
- "that includes a videotape submission, semi-final interviews at select cities, and a final interview in Los Angeles." Change "following" to "through". "includes" implies that there are other steps to being selected that you did not mention; is that the case?
- Done. The process includes the steps mentioned. I did not want to go into too much detail, especially in case steps vary by season.
- After reading the lead, I felt that something was missing. How were HouseGuests removed from the house?
- HouseGuests vote to "evict" a resident, much like on Survivor and many other reality shows. I assumed someone reading this list or the main Big Brother articles would already know this.
- "multiple seasons: In 2006," Make the colon a semicolon.
- Done.
- "8 were selected by American viewers" Comma after here.
- Done.
- "The youngest HouseGuest was Michelle Maradie of Season 4, who entered the house at 19 years old. The oldest HouseGuest was Jerry MacDonald of Season 10, who entered the house at 75 years old."-->The youngest HouseGuest was Michelle Maradie of Season 4, who entered the house at age 19. The oldest HouseGuest was Jerry MacDonald of Season 10, who entered the house at age 75.
- Done.
- "There have been 4 instances" "4"-->four
- Done.
- Readers shouldn't have to click on the links to understand the U.S. state abbreviations. Either spell them out, or create a key.
- This hasn't been addressed. Dabomb87 (talk) 20:26, 3 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Ah! My apologies for forgetting. Hmm, would it be better to just combine the city and state abbreviation, like Miami, FL? I feel writing the state names out makes the column too wide, and a state key would distract from the list itself. --Another Believer (Talk) 20:46, 3 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Assuming you're using U.S. postal abbreviations, you could direct readers to List of U.S. state abbreviations#List. Dabomb87 (talk) 20:50, 3 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- How would I direct readers? With maybe the following under "* Contestant played the game for a second time.": "State abbreviations can be found here"? --Another Believer (Talk) 21:41, 3 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Sure. Dabomb87 (talk) 21:54, 3 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. Actually, added link as note below table, since legend feature is incorporated with the table. Thanks! --Another Believer (Talk) 22:05, 3 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- You need a symbol (e.g. * ^ #) to accompany the color.
- Done.
- We cannot have so many fair use images in the article, especially when there are free alternatives already there. I think they should all be removed, as they don't have any special quality that elevates them over the free images. Dabomb87 (talk) 01:28, 30 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- I'm afraid I am not too familiar with how images work on Wikipedia. I just copied file names that appeared on other Big Brother-related articles. Would you mind removing images that are problematic, if need be? It is a shame I cannot find more free images to use--the image column along the side looks nice.
- Removed most of them, unfortunately. When we have multiple free images, we can't claim that the fair-use images are vital to understanding. Dabomb87 (talk) 20:26, 3 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- While I find the list more visually appealing with the numerous pictures along the side, rules are rules and I appreciate your assistance with making sure the list complies. Much appreciated! --Another Believer (Talk) 20:48, 3 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks so much! Hope this satisfies your requests. --Another Believer (Talk) 02:19, 30 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Oppose until alternative text for images is added (discussion). Dabomb87 (talk) 01:19, 10 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- The only image that really needs it is the one of Howie Gordon. Dabomb87 (talk) 01:45, 10 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Like so? --Another Believer (Talk) 02:03, 10 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks. I edited the alt text a bit; the point is to describe the picture so that even someone who can't see has a rudimentary understanding of what's going on. Dabomb87 (talk) 02:07, 10 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Got it. Wasn't sure how much detail was needed. Thanks so much! Anything else needed to re-gain support? --Another Believer (Talk) 02:09, 10 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- The picture of Jamie could be a bit more descriptive (what she's wearing). Dabomb87 (talk) 02:14, 10 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Oh, sorry. Didn't worry about it too much since previous comment stated only Howie's picture needed one. Done. --Another Believer (Talk) 02:24, 10 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Comment Check the tool box, there's one dead link. Dabomb87 (talk) 15:31, 14 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Replaced with working link. --Another Believer (Talk) 18:23, 14 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Ah! Thanks for the reminder. I forgot to go back and double check the information added by others. Done. --Another Believer (Talk) 18:20, 14 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. --Another Believer (Talk) 17:19, 15 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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