Wikipedia:Peer review/1939 Atlantic hurricane season/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because it recently passed GA, and is structured similarly to 1941 AHS, also an older Atlantic cyclone season. I'd like to get it to FA eventually, and while it's comprehensive, I'm sure a few tweaks could be made. –Juliancolton | Talk 05:02, 22 December 2009 (UTC)
- I gave the prose a once over. It looked good, but I made a few small changes. I'm not an experienced copy-editor, so I won't be offended if you wind up reverting some (most?) of it. Besides that, images need alt-text. That's all I could find. Good luck! ManfromButtonwillow (talk) 06:59, 28 December 2009 (UTC)
- Your chances look great, thanks! It's always great to have an uninvolved pair of eyes to look over the more specialist articles. I think I added alt text to most of the images already, actually. Might have missed one or two though. Cheers, –Juliancolton | Talk 13:51, 28 December 2009 (UTC)
Brianboulton comments: Not a full review, but here are a few (hopefully) helpful suggestions:-
- Second sentence: The word "generally" looks superfluous, as you are only saying that most tropical cyclones form in this period.
- Are "tropical cyclones" and "tropical storms" the same thing? If there is a distiction it should be explained.
- I think the timeline diagram should indicate the year 1939, as I feel diagrams/images should be self-contained if possible
- The term "hectopascal" is not well known, and should have a link.
- Some mph figures are converted to kph and others not - at least, "50 mph" isn't.
I hope this amounts to a bit of a helping hand. Brianboulton (talk) 00:48, 29 December 2009 (UTC)
- Thank you for this review, I'll work on addressing these points shortly. –Juliancolton | Talk 01:14, 31 December 2009 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: I made a dozen or so minor c/e changes, including adding conversions where needed. I have just a few other suggestions. Aside from this and the things mentioned in the reviews above, the article generally looks fine to me.
Main infobox
- Alt text is missing for the top image. I think the solution might be to add the |Track alt = parameter to the infobox and then add the alt text.
Lead
- "All of the storms impacted land to some extent. - "Affected" rather than "impacted"?
Tropical Storm One
- I added a conversion template for 50 mph, which yields 80 km/h. The infobox for this storm gives the metric equivalent as 85 km/h, which I think must be an error.
- The infoboxes use knots instead of mph, perhaps that's the issue? –Juliancolton | Talk 01:14, 31 December 2009 (UTC)
References
- It looks like the newspaper archive you've linked to requires a subscription. You might use the "|format =" parameter to add "subscription required" to the newspaper citations to keep readers who want to read the source stories from getting frustrated.
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog. That is where I found this one. Finetooth (talk) 03:07, 29 December 2009 (UTC)
Fifelfoo on citations
- This was an invited review
- ""Gull Section Beats Hurricanes" Are you sure there's no author?
- "Atlantic hurricane research division (2009)." is a database with numbered lines
- Please provide the relevant lines for the quotes. A massive text file database needs the section cited to be indicated, eg, "at lines 00845-00860" in the |pages= field with |nopp= used if using the cite X templates
- Is this original research? It is a non obvious statement arising from a database. In my field database interpretation is OR. Meteorology might be different. Consider? Prepare to refute if you run into Humanities people on A / GA / FA
- "Jean Galleen (1939)" appears to be published, in a journal. Italics please if it was published. Check for journal issue & volume etc.
- " "Gale Winds Expected Along Florida Coast". The Daily Capital News." Author?
- ""Hurricane Passes Over Florida Tip". The Gallup Independent." Author?
- ""Bermuda Hurricane Rips Up Trees, Halts Utilities". The Chicago Daily Tribune. " Author?
- If any of this no author news articles came through via a wire, (AP, Reuters, etc) you might want to indicate that fact
- Bermuda weather service .doc file, was it published, or just lying around on their website? Have a think about it. It was issued by an authority (published in the wikipedia sense), but citation publication has a different sense, ISSN / ISBN etc.
- Looks good, essentials are there, this is all polishing. Fifelfoo (talk) 14:17, 3 January 2010 (UTC)