Wikipedia:Peer review/2019 Cebu City local elections/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I started this with only a few details and I have been expanding it since. There are still a lot of news articles available online about the said local elections which could further improve content in this article but I want your feedback on its current content. Feel free to drop also your suggestions.
Thanks, Emperork (talk) 11:51, 4 September 2019 (UTC)
Comments by paul2520
[edit]Hi, Emperork, and thanks for your efforts on this article. Here are my comments, more-or-less in order as I read through and reviewed the article:
- The wording "which allied his group with Liberal Party" is confusing to me.
- Is "BARUG Team Rama" a political party?
- "The names ... were floated..." --> I know this phrase, but "floated" seems trivial (after all, anyone can say anything). Per the reference, it sounds like there was a more official recommendation, can the wording be updated?
- This sentence needs an inline citation: "The election of Resch and Ong returned the..."
- Might the lines like "Rodrigo Abellanosa ran for his third and final term." be changed to "Rodrigo Abellanosa was elected for his third and final term." or "Rodrigo Abellanosa ran for his third and final term, and won."?
- I'll admit, I don't generally read articles like this in detail. Are the "City Council" tables all populated with people actually elected?
My biggest concern is that there are some similar wording to referenced sources, as seen in this Earwig's copyvio report. I'd like to see less text get flagged as similar to sources, and think the wording should be easy to adjust. Some of these cases may simply require direct quotations, but probably not all of them.
Above all, nice work. = paul2520 (talk) 18:47, 20 December 2019 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review paul2520! Regarding this:
- I noticed that also just now. I already changed it from "which allied his group with Liberal Party" to "who allied his group with Liberal Party"
- Yes, BARUG Team Rama is a political party. I didn't linked it since there was no article pertaining to it. But I already created and linked it with Partido Barug. It's previous name was BARUG Team Rama.
- Changed it from "floated" to "recommended".
- Re: "The election of Resch and Ong returned the..." pertained to the return of the majority status of BO–PK after it was lost when BARUG Team Rama got a majority number of council members.
- Followed your recommendation including for the mayor, vice mayor sections.
- The City Council section is about the list of candidates and includes the results of the said elections. The members of the council are listed in a separate article: Cebu City Council.
I will work on the copyvio report. — Emperork (talk) 17:41, 21 December 2019 (UTC)