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I've listed this article for peer review because I plan to submit it to GAN shortly. The article is modeled on similar GA class Croatian motorway articles, it and has recently been copyedited by WP:GOCE.
Thanks, Tomobe03 (talk) 12:59, 5 December 2010 (UTC)
Comments from Niagara
- "The A7 motorway (Croatian: Autocesta A7) is a motorway in Croatia which is 34.4 kilometres (21.4 mi) long.[1]"
- Tightened: "The A7 motorway (Croatian: Autocesta A7) is a 34.4 kilometre (21.4 mi) long motorway in Croatia.[1]" Done per suggestion.
- "...provides access to Učka Nature Park and thus indirectly to numerous resorts, notably in the Istria and Kvarner Gulf regions."
- Tightened: "...prvides access to Učka Nature Park and, indirectly, to numerous resortsin the Istria and Kvarner Gulf regions. Done per suggestion.
- "The motorway is nationally significant because it has a positive economic impact on the cities and towns it connects and because it contributes to tourism in Croatia.[5]"
- Grammar/punctuation: "The motorway is nationally significant because of its positive economic impact on the cities and towns it connects, and because of its contribution to tourism in Croatia."[4] Done per suggestion.
- "As the route traverses rugged terrain, it requires numerous bridges, viaducts, tunnels, and other structures."
- Flipped: "Numerous bridges, viaducts, tunnels, and other structures were required as the route traverses rugged terrain." Done per suggestion.
- "Current long-term plans for developing the A7 motorway define its ultimate southern terminus in Žuta Lokva at the interchange of the A1 motorway. This section is no longer part of any short-term plans, as no funding until 2012 is currently scheduled for the section"
- Reworded: "Current long-term plans for developing the A7 motorway involves an extension of the southern terminus to he interchange with the A1 motorway at Žuta Lokva. This section is no longer included in any short-terms plans, as no funding is going to appropriated for it until 2012." Done per suggestion, a section in between the two sentence left as it was.
- "The filling stations are small convenience stores, and they offer LPG fuel."
- Flipped, Missing verb? (your welcome choose the word): "The filling stations also offer LPG fuel and (are attached to/include) small convenience stores." Done per suggestion - verb missing indeed, opted for "include" as the convenience stores are operated by the rest area operators themselves and share checkout with the filling station (fuel and anything bought in the store are charged together, unless specifically requested otherwise).
Another fine highway article...nice work! Niagara Don't give up the ship 23:11, 5 December 2010 (UTC)
- Thank you for your comments, they were helpful.--Tomobe03 (talk) 01:03, 6 December 2010 (UTC)