Wikipedia:Peer review/Abdel Halim Mohamed/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because… to prepare for the GA review as this process was recommend to me by another editor
Thanks, FuzzyMagma (talk) 18:18, 5 January 2023 (UTC)
Comments from Z1720
[edit]Comments after a quick skim:
- The lede is five paragraphs, which according to WP:LEDE is longer than is recommended. I suggest trimming this and ensuring that all of this information is in the body of the article.
- Lots of the citations have been put at the end of the paragraph that they are verifying, which makes it hard to figure out which sources verify which sentences. I suggest moving references to be beside the sentence they are verifying.
- In "Literary and political activism", the final three sections are quite short, causing MOS:OVERSECTION. Can these be merged or expanded?
- Please add the author of the source to the references, if possible.
Those are my thoughts. Z1720 (talk) 22:22, 8 January 2023 (UTC)
- @Z1720 thanks FuzzyMagma (talk) 20:42, 18 January 2023 (UTC)