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Alexander Hamilton

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I've listed this article for peer review because I am in the process of nominating this as a GA article, but there needs to be a review on potential corrections so the process can be minimized whenever I nominate it. I'm in the process of finding more sources for the Hamilton-Burr Duel, but want review for other sections that can be elaborated further, and check for the prospects of NPOV being violated. Please respond as soon as you can!

Thanks for reading, LeftAire (talk) 22:45, 4 January 2015 (UTC)

Comments: G'day, good work so far. I had a look mainly at referencing and have the following comments/suggestions which might help bring the article up to GA standards: AustralianRupert (talk) 10:34, 11 January 2015 (UTC)

• at eight paragraphs, the lead is too long. I believe that four paragraphs is the recommended length per WP:LEAD

Y Done. LeftAire (talk) 17:02, 21 January 2015 (UTC)

• is there a reference/citation that could be added for this: "The important duties with which he was entrusted attest to Washington's deep confidence in his abilities and character, then and later. At the points in their relationship when there was little personal attachment, there was yet always a reciprocal confidence and respect."

Y Although it's true, couldn't source it properly. Removed it. LeftAire (talk) 17:02, 21 January 2015 (UTC)

• this appears to be unreferenced: "Hamilton was also close to Eliza's older sister, Angelica, who eloped with John Barker Church, an Englishman who made a fortune in North America during the Revolution. She returned with Church to London after the war, where she later became a joint friend of Maria Cosway and Thomas Jefferson."

Y Fixed. LeftAire (talk) 17:02, 21 January 2015 (UTC)

• this appears unreferenced: "Hamilton supported congressmen such as Superintendent of Finance Robert Morris, his assistant Gouverneur Morris (no relation), along with James Wilson and James Madison, to provide the Congress with the independent source of revenue it lacked under the Articles of Confederation."

Y Removed. Can't be sourced properly. LeftAire (talk) 17:02, 21 January 2015 (UTC)

• this appears unreferenced: "It was at this time that a group of officers organized under the leadership of General Henry Knox sent a delegation to lobby Congress, led by Capt. Alexander MacDougall (see above). The officers had three demands: the Army's pay, their own pensions, and commutation of those pensions into a lump-sum payment."

YFixed. LeftAire (talk) 17:02, 21 January 2015 (UTC)

• this appears unreferenced: "The Continental Congress was never able to secure full ratification for back pay, pensions, or its own independent sources of funding." Fixed. LeftAire (talk) 17:02, 21 January 2015 (UTC)
• the first paragraph of the "Constitution and The Federalist Papers" section seems unreferenced

Y Fixed. LeftAire (talk) 17:02, 21 January 2015 (UTC)

• this appears unreferenced: "Since the other two members of the New York delegation, Lansing and Yates, had already withdrawn, Hamilton was the only New York signer to the United States Constitution. He then took a highly active part in the successful campaign for the document's ratification in New York in 1788, which was a crucial step in its national ratification."

Y Fixed. LeftAire (talk) 17:02, 21 January 2015 (UTC)

• there are several sentences in the "Report on Public Credit" section that appear unreferenced

Y Fixed. LeftAire (talk) 17:02, 21 January 2015 (UTC)

• the second paragraph in the "Jay Treaty and Britain" section appears unreferenced

Y Fixed. LeftAire (talk) 17:02, 21 January 2015 (UTC)

• this wording doesn't seem quite right: "and James Reynolds even requesting to 'befriend' her in January 1792".

Y Fixed. LeftAire (talk) 17:02, 21 January 2015 (UTC)

• this also seems a bit awkward: "Hamilton is thought have being aware of both Reynolds' being involved"

Y Fixed. LeftAire (talk) 17:02, 21 January 2015 (UTC)

• the first two pargraphs of the "1796 presidential election" section appear unreferenced

Y Fixed. LeftAire (talk) 17:02, 21 January 2015 (UTC)

• the first paragraph of the "1800 presidential election" seems unreferenced

Y Fixed. LeftAire (talk) 17:02, 21 January 2015 (UTC)

• please check the date format, per WP:DATESNO "June 27th 1804" should probably be "June 27, 1804"

Y Fixed. LeftAire (talk) 17:02, 21 January 2015 (UTC)

• is there a citation that can be added for this: "Biographer Ron Chernow considers the circumstances to indicate that Burr fired second, after having taken deliberate aim."?

Y Fixed. LeftAire (talk) 17:02, 21 January 2015 (UTC)

• the second paragaph of the Legacy section appears unreferenced

Y LeftAire (talk) 19:58, 21 January 2015 (UTC)

• there appear to be a number of unreferenced sentences or paragraphs in the "Monuments and memorials" section

Y LeftAire (talk) 19:58, 21 January 2015 (UTC)

• the presentation of the works in the Biographies section appears to be inconsistent with those in the Specialized studies section. For instance compare how the year comes towards the end in the Biographies entries, but in the Specialized studies section it is in brackets near the author names

Y LeftAire (talk) 19:58, 21 January 2015 (UTC)

• • Phew. I think that I'll nominate it for GA now. Hopefully what else needs to be fixed is minimal. Thanks for the suggestions! LeftAire (talk) 19:58, 21 January 2015 (UTC)