Wikipedia:Peer review/Aquarium/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because it is a former featured article that I would like to see get up to at least good, preferably back to featured, however in the past I have had trouble finding problems, so I'd like some assistance with that before I start working on it.
Thanks, L'Aquatique[talk] 19:51, 8 August 2008 (UTC)
Comments
- The lead section needs to be expanded. Remember, according to WP:LEAD, the lead section needs to be a "concise overview".
- Overbolding in the lead: only the title of the article and alternate names of the subject of the article should be in bold.
- Combine some of the one-sentence paragraphs; they interrupt flow. Alternatively, expand those sentence-paragraphs with relevant information.
- "kreisel tank" and "virtual aquarium" needs to be unbolded.
- Aquarium maintenance needs more references; here are some examples:
- "Large volumes of water enable more stability in a tank by diluting effects from death or contamination."
- "Biological loading is a measure of the burden placed on the aquarium ecosystem by its living inhabitants."
- "In addition to bacteria, aquatic plants also eliminate nitrogen waste by metabolizing ammonia and nitrate."
- The list in the section Aquarium#Calculating_aquarium_capacity needs to be converted to prose, if possible.
- Overlinking-nitrogen cycle, nitrite (among others)
- In general, more references needed throughout
- A good copyedit is necessary, especially if you want FA.
- The word aquaria seems to be used a bit excessively. Is there any other word that can replace it sometimes?
I hope these comments helped. If you want a more thorough rundown, contact me at my talk page. Dabomb87 (talk) 23:47, 14 August 2008 (UTC)