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Barney Gumble

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I've listed this article for peer review for FA-readiness. Thanks, Tj terrorible1 (talk) 16:31, 2 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comment I think the article is too short to be FA, but its anyway a good article, thought does not go with WP:NOTABILITY. --Fixman_{(Praise me)} 19:55, 3 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Another Comment: why do you think this article is FA ready if its just a C-class article? Instead, try to make it a B-class article or a good article before. --Fixman_{(Praise me)} 19:56, 3 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. I agree with the above comments and do not think this is yet at GA level, let alone FA, but there is a good start here.

Lead does not meet WP:LEAD. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way
Article needs many more references - the whole first paragraph in the Personality section has no refs. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
The article is written chiefly from an in-universe perspective and should be written more from an out of universe persepctive. Only 2 of the 14 refs are not directly from the Simpsons episodes or DVDs. What have critics said about Barney? The stuff people associated with the show say about him is good, but there has to be more. See WP:IN-U.
A model article is often useful for ideas and examples to follow - there are several FAs on fictional characters that many be good models, see Troy McClure or Jabba the Hutt

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 17:20, 5 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]