Wikipedia:Peer review/Bart Simpson/archive2
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I've listed this article for peer review because I'm hoping to have the page FAC ready soon. I'll probably submit a FAC by Friday, so this won't be open long.
Thanks, Scorpion0422 04:04, 2 November 2008 (UTC)
There is some occasional overlinking, especially in the merchandising section. Also, I have troubles linking "do not age" to immortality. Also, my personal preference is to list 'references' that use the show's episodes, separate from the 'true' references. Consider using the <ref group=note> trick. Nergaal (talk) 04:33, 3 November 2008 (UTC)
Comments With just a quick scan I can see a real lack of info. Just examples:
- Nothing about his character development
- No mention of him being a fan of Radioactive Man
- Don't quite understand the Role in The Simpsons section, it seems more to be about his age, why is so short? why is it the lead section?
- "Reception and cultural influence" section should be split. It's not clear what's Reception and what's cultural influence.
- "Bart is sometimes willing to go through a series of humiliations if it means pleasing his mom." example?
- "While Bart has often hurt Lisa" example?
- Has this article has a copy edit.If not get someone to do one before you even consider making it a FAC.