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Battle of Ginnis

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I've listed this article for peer review. I created this a while back, and it is far from the best article I have written. I would like to improve it - I made some minor restructuring edits about a month ago - and am interested in comments from other editors on the article's quality.

Thanks, DCItalk 20:03, 9 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, DCI. Interesting article. Sorry, I don't have any content knowledge, but I have some general suggestions (aimed towards raising the article to B class standard). Feel free to ignore or implement as you see fit:
- the lead probably needs to be expanded to at least a full paragraph (currently it is only one sentence);
- English variation: the article appears to use some US English spelling, when it should possibly use British English given that the topic relates to Britain (e.g "color" --> "colour", "defenses" --> "defences");
- the addition of an infobox and/or some images (this would cover off on the B5 criterion);
- referencing: at least one citation per paragraph for B class, but the more the better. If possible, my suggestion is to mix paper sources (books) with online sources;
- watch out for overlink - "brigade" is linked a number of times in the one paragraph (there may be others);
- is there any information on casualties that could be added to the article? AustralianRupert (talk) 10:48, 20 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Agree the lead needs expanding
The date format is not standard British style 30 December - its not a problem for me but it may be brought up at any higher review
Anglo-Egyptian Army - Anglo is not commonly known outside of ex British Empire country's suggest change to the British and Egyptian army
Dervish can be linked
Dervish State instead of Dervish Empire
The abbreviation Berkshire has been used while the other infantry regiment have the correct titles Durham Light Infantry for example. You should be consistent with what method you use
First Brigade and Second Brigade should be 1st and 2nd Brigade especially as you use 2nd Brigade later on. Or as was common for the time use the commanders name - Butlers Brigade - what ever you choose be consistent
White sun helmet can be linked to pith helmet
Screw gun can be linked to RML 2.5 inch Mountain Gun
More in line citations are required
The bare url reference should be formatted use the cite web format
If Queen Victoria's Little Wars by Byron Farwell is a book you should use the cite book format

Well done a good start, if you need any help or have any questions just drop me a note here or on my talk. Jim Sweeney (talk) 17:51, 20 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Hello. I am sorry it's taken me so long to respond, but I've been caught up in another review. I will be able to work on this more in the coming week. Thank you for your comments. DCItalk 17:36, 23 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]