Wikipedia:Peer review/Bernard Hopkins vs. Joe Calzaghe/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I created it in April and I've been working out it since and I've received a peer review yet on this article.
Thanks, Rvk41 (talk) 21:48, 4 May 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting article, here are some suggestions for improvement:
- A model article is useful for ideas on style, refs, structure, etc. Unfortunately I do not see a boxing match GA or FA, but try asking at WikiProject Boxing for ideas.
- The lead needs to be expanded per WP:LEAD and should summarize the whole article.
- Watch out for POV and peacock language, for example For quite some time, this matchup seemed destined to be one of the great what-might-have-beens in recent boxing history. While Hopkins made 20 consecutive title defenses as a middleweight before two losses to Jermain Taylor, Calzaghe dominated the super middleweight division from Europe during a decade-long reign that still hasn't ended. See WP:NPOV and WP:PEACOCK
- These two sentences are just one example of many that also need citations / references. Generally each paragraph, any statistics, all direct quotes, and any extraordinary claims need a ref. See WP:CITE and WP:V
- Please give both metric and English units - the {{convert}} template is useful here - example Both fighters weighed in at 173 lb.[6]
- Minimize or explain jargon - for example Hopkins appeared to be fighting his fight as he was gliding off his backfoot around the ring and he landed his first flush punch - wikilinks can help here too
- What did people other than the two boxers say about the fight? What did sportswriters write about it? Did they feel it was a fair fight and agree with the split decision by the judges? Put the fight into context for the reader, WP:PCR
- Refs look good.
Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 02:15, 9 May 2008 (UTC)