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Board of directors

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I've listed this article for peer review because this article seems to be a prime FA candidate, and one of the steps to candidacy is peer review.

Thanks, CJ Miller. (^{That's my name.}_{Don't wear it out.}) 02:56, 27 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement - I do not think this is anywhere near FA quality and think it needs work to get to GA. If you want more comments, please ask here.

The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way - also need at most four paragraphs in the lead (this has six or so). Please see WP:LEAD
Per WP:CITE references come AFTER punctuation, and are usually at the end of a sentence or phrase. Article needs MANY more references. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref. Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
Article has many lists (bullet points) that should be converted to prose in almost all cases. Also has many short (one or two sentence) paragraphs that should be combined with other paragraphs or perhaps expanded.
An FA requirement is to have an image - this has nonw. See WP:WIAFA and look at any recent FA for model articles.
Article seems to focus mostly on the UK and Commonwaelth - what about other countries?

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 02:39, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]