Wikipedia:Peer review/Burger King products/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because after working on it for several years, I want to bring it into Good Article status like its siblings Burger King and Burger King legal issues. I need an outside eye to critique it and tell me what needs to be done to improve it.
Thanks, Jeremy ( Blah blah...) 05:13, 8 October 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.
The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article - per WP:LEAD this should have a 3 or perhaps 4 paragraph lead. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way. *The article may need fewer sections / header too, and the headers do not meet WP:HEAD, for example "Chicken & Fish" or "Chicken and fish"Some expansion done, now 3 paragraphs.
Done--Jeremy (blah blah) 23:48, 2 June 2009 (UTC)There are huge numbers of fair use images in the article - even the pictures of the food products that show logos could be problematic. See WP:NFCCremoved. Done --Jeremy (blah blah) 23:48, 2 June 2009 (UTC)There are a large number of sections that are very list-y and should be converted to prose. Done --Jeremy (blah blah) 06:44, 4 June 2009 (UTC)Make sure abbreviations are defined before their first use (for example BK) Done --Jeremy (blah blah) 23:48, 2 June 2009 (UTC)- Biggest problem I see is that the article needs more references, for example almost none of the products are referenced. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
Working Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V Done --Jeremy (blah blah) 23:48, 2 June 2009 (UTC)
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 03:19, 18 October 2008 (UTC)