Wikipedia:Peer review/Campbell's Soup Cans/archive1
I stumbled upon the WP:PR process yesterday by typographical error of another editor who was trying to send me to WP:PRO. I am in the neighborhood of 5000 edits and am preparing to apply for adminship this month. I think this process may be a good learning process to round out my experiences here at wikipedia. I have only produced unpolished articles which you can see on my user page and think it may be worth an attempt to produce a high quality article. Unfortunately, I am more of an analytical type and not a very good writer. Thus, I am not sure what type of feedback to ask for. I guess anything that will help me improve the article would be fine. I would appreciate any help in finding additional images for the gallery as well. TonyTheTiger 17:17, 4 December 2006 (UTC)
Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ t 22:24, 4 December 2006 (UTC)
- Needs more wikilinking.
Also, it requires footnotes - see WP:FN (convert the external links in the middle of the text toThe web photo gallery remark is unneeded, and in fact the gallery itself is definitely unneeded. Not only does WP:FUC call for a limited usage of fair use images unless free use images don't exist (and there is at least 1), but galleries are discouraged in general. Alphabetize the categories. Is the word "portrait" appropriate here? Portraits are of people.<ref>{{cite web|url=~~~|author=~~~}}</ref>(see {{cite web}}).Also, "trivia" sections in general are discouraged as being unencyclopedic in tone; consider merging anything important in trivia sections to the rest of the article.
- Also needs a copyedit, especially if you are looking for WP:FAC. Take a look at this (linkless) paragraph (place your cursor over the underlined words to see my comments):
He had a very positive view of ordinary culture and felt the Abstract Impressionists had taken great pains to ignore the splendor of modernity. The Campbell's Soup Can series along with his other series provided him a chance to express his positive view of modern culture. However his deadpan work, endeavored to be devoid of emotional and social commentary.
His work differed from series work by other artists such as Monet, who used series to represent discriminating perception. They showed that the painter could recreate shifts in time, light, season, and weather with hand and eye. Warhol represented the modern era of commercialization and indiscriminate sameness. When Warhol eventually showed variation it was not realistic. It was in a sense his variation in colors shown later was almost a mockery of discriminating perception.
Please see other related WP:FAs for ideas to start with. AZ t 22:57, 4 December 2006 (UTC)