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Cathedral of Toledo

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I've listed this article for peer review because it is a translated version of the Featured Article in the Spanish article. It is very detailled (about 90 kBytes big). I need critical eyes before submitting for GA nomination.

Thanks, Alberto Fernandez Fernandez (talk) 13:01, 23 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comment You will need more inline citations in order to meet GA. You obviously have references in the reference section but do not cite page numbers etc. So that is one thing I can tell you right off the bat. This is obviously a labour of love so supplying the citations shouldn't be a problem and will strengthen the article immensely.Hope that helps.--Anothroskon (talk) 11:51, 28 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Very nice photos and agree that this is a labor of love. The thing is that each language's Wikipedia has different standards, here are some suggestions for improvement of the article to meet the standards here.

Article needs more references, there are whole sections without any inline refs. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. As such, nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself but the EUR 7 admission (as one example) is only in the lead.
As a summary, my rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way. Please see WP:LEAD The article may need fewer sections / headers too.
The section headers do not meet WP:HEAD which says not to repeat all or pert of the article title if at all possible. So headers like "The Renaissance grillwork in the cathedral" could just be "Renaissance grillwork" (drop "The", already know that it is in the cathedral)
Use of bold and italic and all capitals does not follow WP:ITALIC and the WP:MOS
Article has many short (one or two sentence) paragraphs that interfere with the flow of the prose - these should be combined with others or perhaps expanded where possible.
The article uses {{cquote}} but according the documentation at Template:Cquote this is for pull quotes only, and this should probably use {{blockquote}} instead.
The long quote in Latin has to have a translation provided
The text needs a copyedit to clean up many small problems - it reads like a translation that still needs some polish.
Some of the language runs the risk of violating WP:NPOV - The magnificence of the cathedral of Toledo has always raised among the critics and historians of art great admirations and compliments. If this is a direct quote with a citation, it would be OK.
The tools in the box at upper right finds one disambiguation wikilink, one dead external link, and no alt text (needed per WP:ALT).

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 05:18, 2 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]