Wikipedia:Peer review/Celle Air Base/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to know what other users than the two main authors (Ekki01 and me) think about it. Mabye even get it ready for GA or FA when time permitts.
Thanks, It wasn't me (talk) 21:19, 14 November 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting article. Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement.
- The lead needs to be expanded per WP:LEAD so that it is an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way
- Article needs more references, for example the third apragraph of Location and approach or the last paragraph of Bundeswehr 1957 until the present (before Disaster relief) have no refs. Several of the sections on units using the air base are also uncited. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref. See WP:CITE and WP:V
- Per the MOS, images should not sandwich text (but do in several places, such as Allied occupation 1945 until 1957
- I would translate German in images such as Image:Titelbild Cellesche Zeitung vom 30. November 1957.jpg (German aircraft again at Celle...)
- The list of units would likely be a problem at WP:FAC - a lot of bullet points and not much flowing prose. Could it be broken out as a separate article and then briefly summarized here per WP:Summary style?
- There are a lot of short (one or two sentence) paragraphs that break up the flow of the article - could they be combined with others or perhaps expanded?
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 02:24, 25 November 2008 (UTC)