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Chikaraishi

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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to see whether it might be worth submitting for GA in future. It is, however, quite short (there's only so much that can be written on what are, basically, just a bunch of rocks), so as well as reviewing what's there I'd like suggestions for possible expansion. For the record, I believe that the article's list of references contains just about every available source in English; there may, however, be more available in Japanese.

Thanks, Yunshui 雲‍水 10:07, 1 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Thanks for an interesting article. This seems fairly close to GA to me, here are some suggestions for improvement.

The lead needs to be expanded to properly summarize the article per WP:LEAD. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself, but "The term refers to both the rocks themselves and to the practice of lifting them." seems to only be in the lead.
My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way. There is however no real history in the lead, no mention of their connection with Shinto temples, and no mention that this is a sport.
Wikilinking Japan in the lead may be seen as WP:OVERLINKing - most readers will know what Japan is.
At the same time, I would link Edo on first occurence.
Avoid vague time terms like "currently" in It is estimated that there are around 14,000 strength-stones currently located in shrines around Japan.[2]Many are inscribed ... I would use "as of 2005" as the ref is from 2005.
In the sentence quoted above, a space is needed between the ref and the start of the next sentence
Content seems fine - I am not familiar with the stones or the practice of lifting them, so do not know if there are major omissions. I think it would be OK to use Japanese sources assuming that they meet WP:RS and you (or someone) can read them. My guess is that there may be more material in Japanese than English on this topic
The Soja Festival reference needs to identify the language it is in (presumably Japanese)
Make sure the little things are consistent - in The Journal of Japanese studies, Volume 29. Society for Japanese Studies. 2003. p. 236. why is studies lower case in the name of the journal but upper case in the name of the publisher / society? Seems like they would be consistent and probably both upper case.
Articles in a journal almost always have a separate title and an identified author - this information should be included for the ref I just quoted.
I would give the Japanese name (Hojo undō) in addition to just "special stones"
Not a lot more to say as the article is pretty short and what is there is well written and appears to be well supported by the refs used (though I did not check refs to see if they met WP:RS)
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Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 18:43, 16 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks for this thorough and helpful review; I have edited the article to address the points raised. Yunshui 雲‍水 09:35, 21 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]