Wikipedia:Peer review/Christmas tree cultivation/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to take it to FA and am hoping for some input on how to improve it technically. It would be nice if some folks more familiar with the topic from a professional standpoint were able to input on content. Specifically how can this be improved, through addition, or subtraction?
Hmm, horticultural? I can see the other two adjectives in the first sentence but a bit unsure about this one. If you're happy with it fine, but to me horticulture implies gardening which this isn't really. Anyway more to come...Cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 00:40, 19 April 2008 (UTC)
- For optimum yield and quality, land should be flat or gently rolling and relatively free of debris and undergrowth.- to me sounds a tiny bit like a 'how-to' manual. I'd try to rephrase - the best/most suitable land for x is ...
- Aphids and adelgids are the most common problems among insect pests - " Aphids and adelgids are the most common insect problems" -reduces repetition of 'pests' as long as meaning conserved
Thanks, IvoShandor (talk) 07:12, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
- evergreens.. I can see why you've abbreviated to avoid the repetition of 'tree' in the sentence. I'd think conifer fits better here as it is more global. Outside of the US and Europe, most of us don't really use the word evergreen (Eucalypts are evergreen..)
- If we're really getting stuck into cultivation, I didn't see a mention of pH
Summary - I began by doing some copyediting and the prose and structure are pretty good, but then I realised the article is pretty US-Centric WRT History - there is very little from the UK or Europe. Or Australia, where plenty of the things are grown too. I am now intrigued to hunt down some Australian material too. I don't know what they do in South America or South Africa either. I'll get back to you on that one.Cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 01:07, 19 April 2008 (UTC)
- Sounds good, I appreciate you looking at this. Feel free to make any changes you want as far as copyediting stuff, I have seen this piece so many times I fear that I may have been rendered ineffective in that department for this particular article.
- I also wanted to point out User:IvoShandor/Christmas tree farms work page where I have compiled what else (related) I am working on. One thing I have tried hard to avoid is using any web sites of specific tree farms as references. You'll notice a more worldly take on things linked from that page. Ideally, when I complete those articles there will be some to add and summarize in the main article.