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Could've Been You

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I've listed this article for peer review because… I want to see if it is written well and has all the possible criteria for a GA nomination.

Thanks, Kekkomereq4 (talk) 16:00, 422 October 2009 (UTC)

Comments from Liquidluck (talk)

Thanks for working on articles about older subjects, which I've always found are much harder. I would recommend visiting your local library to see if more information on this song is available in a book. I'm sure several Cher biographies have come out in the last 17 years. Onwards:

Lead

• Billboard magazine says here that "Could've Been You" is a cover of a single released by Bob Halligan off his album Window in the Wall: "The only single released from the album was "Could've Been You" (later cut by Cher), which, Halligan dryly notes, "lasted three weeks at radio. It came out to the sound of one hand clapping.'" (He's referring to his own version there, not Cher's). This info should definitely and obviously be added to the article. The first sentence would change from "by American singer-actress Cher" to "popularized by American...".
• Insert the names of the songwriters into the lead.
• In early 1992 for only ->In early 1992 exclusively for the European market.
• Remove "respectable" and "despite" from the sentence, per WP:PEACOCK. Simply say, "...mixed reviews from critics and peaked at number thirty-one on the UK Singles Chart. Love Hurts had already spent six weeks at number one at the time of the single's release." Also, say number one on what chart.
• "This was due to the promotion that the single received, such as a Top Of The Pops appearance and various performance during the Love Hurts Tour in selected venue." to "Cher promoted the song through an appearance at a Top of The Pops concert and her Love Hurts Tour".

Song information

• Per WP:SONGS, headers with the word song in them are discouraged, because it is assumed you're talking about the song. Change "Song info" to "Background".
• Add info about the original Halligan version to this section.
• "Asher who had previously worked with Cher on her..."
• Change "latest" to the year, I.E., "her 1991 UK number one hit single, "The Shoop Shoop..."
• You say the single was released twice; you should either state the time of the second release or make it clear that it was a release in a different format. If it is the latter, remove first and second, put a period before "while", delete while, and say "it was later released as a ______, with "Love and Understanding as its B-side."
• wikilink B-side
• You use " for inches; change those to the word "inch" and wikilink to Gramophone_record#Common_formats.
• used for both covers

Music video

• Change "music video" to "promotion"
• The entire second half of the section is not sourced. It should be easy to find a book source for this.

Overall, read the article outloud to yourself to catch grammar errors- there are a good bit of them, but you should be able to get them all. Thanks again for working on the article, and good luck with GA!