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Dave Smallen

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I've listed this article for peer review because…

I've made it for Dave Smallen personally, and he's provided me with all of the provided information.

Thanks, Arielphipps (talk) 03:33, 16 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Danger comments: The most obvious improvement that needs to be made is including references. Wikipedia articles must be verifiable and this means providing reliable sources to support the information in the article. The subject himself does not count as a source because there is no way for other editors to verify the information that he has supplied to you. Because the subject is a living person, this is especially important.

Additionally, the article currently does not prove the notability of the subject. Wikipedia requires sources independent of the subject to meet this criterion. The subject's MySpace is not a third party source, while a review in a magazine or newspaper would be. --Danger (talk) 13:27, 17 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Brianboulton comments: This article is not suitable for peer review, which is "intended for high-quality articles that have already undergone extensive work, often as a way of preparing a featured article candidate." The article is very slight, and has two major cleanup banners. The review should be closed. Brianboulton (talk) 00:10, 19 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments

Agree this needs refs to establish notability. Without them it may be deleted.
My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article and needs to be expanded beyond one sentence.
My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way. Please see WP:LEAD
Any chance for a free image of him?
A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow - there are many articles on musicians at Wikipedia:Featured_articles#Music that may be good models.

Hope this helps. I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 03:55, 19 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]