Wikipedia:Peer review/David O. Selznick filmography/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because David O. Selznick is one of the all-time great filmmakers so he really warrants a great filmography. So let's get started in making this a featured list.
Thanks, Jimknut (talk) 00:02, 13 September 2011 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: This looks pretty good to me - thanks for your work on it. Here are some fairly minor suggestions for improvement.
- I usually suggest a model article for ideas and examples to follow, but I am guessing the filmography FLs are mostly from you anyway, so you know what to do. ;-)
The lead is WP:OVERLINKed - I know it is OK to link something multiple times in sortable tables, but GWTW is linked four times in just the lead and twice in the last paragraph.- Corrected; film titles are linked only once in the intro except for GWTW, which is linked twice).
I made a few copyedits as I read along - please revert if I made a mistake or made things worse- No, your edits are fine; thanks
I like the quotations from Selznick himself at the start of each section, but I think that their use of italics for direct quotations does not follow WP:ITALIC and WP:MOSQUOTEIf the quotes need to be set off somehow, one possibility I thought of would be to use quote boxes for each Selznick quote - the template is adjustable in terms of width, so the box could be the width of the page.- Valid suggestions, but I think it's okay the way it is right now. I believe the use of italics emphasizes that they are quotes and not plagiarism. (Besides, WP:MOSQUOTE is under discussion.)
I might also mention the quotes from Selznick in the intro - just as the book sources are mentioned.I might spell out the titles of the books in The release dates, titles, and names of the directors for Selznick's films are derived from the filmographies presented in the Behlmer and Haver books.[18][19]- Changed. The titles of the books are spelled out and so are the full names of the two authors. The quotes are also noted as coming from Mr. Behlmer's book.
There is a free photo of Selznick and Jones in the Jones article - might be useful here.- Another valid suggestion, but I think I will stick with the head shot of Mr. Selznick.
Did not see any other real problems of issues - thanks!- No, thank you!
Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see Wikipedia:Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches. (This is a general warning given in all peer reviews, in view of previous problems that have risen over copyvios.)- Thanks again. I am confident that I'm okay here. The text is my own except for the obvious quotes.
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 20:05, 24 September 2011 (UTC)
- The comments helped a great deal. Thanks once again. I've done some peer reviews in the past. I will look over a few that are current. Jimknut (talk) 18:42, 25 September 2011 (UTC)
PS The Behlmer book is dated 1972, but the refs use 1972, 1973 amd 1974 as years. This needs to be fixed. I am also not sure that the year needs to be given at all - there is only one ref by Behlmer, so why give the year? Ruhrfisch ><>°° 23:39, 24 September 2011 (UTC)
- The years have now been removed.