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Dennis Berry

Previously submitted to peer review before (see archive), the article has been reformatted to be clearer and more concise. Two album covers have been added and more of his works have been added to the table at the bottom. I'm hoping to get some feedback regarding the content (what needs to be improved upon, what should be expanded, what is unclear etc.); layout; and any other general comments.

As there is nothing (that I know of) about Dennis Berry in print, it's difficult to cite references. The only things I have are the actual records he made (and I assume there are some documents concerning those and their production), Performing Rights Society (PRS) royalties breakdowns which document where his work is currently being used, and what I have learnt through discussions with my grandmother and my mother. I have been able to find a few websites which mention him, which have also been added to the article. Howie ☎ 02:20, 14 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

The article is just generally lacking context. The 'Early life' and 'Marriage and family' sections are just too short, maybe they could be merged together and retitled. The lead is very short, the lead of an article should summarize all the details into one or two concise paragraphs (see WP:Lead). There are lots of red links in the Career section which you may want to fix. There is also a lack of external links, I was expecting quite a few more other websites than just IMDB. Good work so far, keep it up. — Wackymacs 16:54, 14 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the feedback! I'll get on and sort out the early life/marrige parts - I'm sure I can find out more about that from my grandmother, As for the external links... well there's not much else I can provide other than the IDMb listing, and the references. He seems to be continuously left out of most sites regarding light music, or he barely gets a mention; and there is certainly no official site or anything like that. Not sure what else I can really add to that. Howie ☎ 17:51, 14 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]