Wikipedia:Peer review/Deus ex machina/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review to receive feedback on the changes and additions I have made to the article.
Thanks, Jsattler07 (talk) 03:51, 11 November 2014 (UTC)
Hi Julia,
Overall, I think this page looks great!
The page has a detailed and clear overview section that gives important details, as well as organized sections. One section that might be missing is history/origin. Can you tell us something about whoever invented it or first used it, as well, can you tell us how, if at all, the device has changed overtime ( ie. started as gods actually coming down on machines, now could be magic, a new creature, character, or event that might have nothing to do with gods or machinery) it might be unclear to readers how an unexpected event and a god coming down front the sky are the same. Most of the sections are quite detailed, but I do think that you could add more to the examples. Knowing a little more background for each example might be helpful to a reader, and maybe even some non literary examples, like movies and tv. You have many good links in the text and a nice list of references. The information is clear, fairly comprehensive, and certainly related to the topic.
Hope this helps!
Gilliark (talk) 21:55, 14 November 2014 (UTC)
Hey Jsattler07.
Overall I think you're in great shape. Here are a few thoughts to keep it going.
- I think you should give the term's literal translation in the Lead, rather than waiting for Origins.
- Can you find an image that clearly shows the Machine itself? It would be great to have a very clear idea of what it looked like in an Ancient Greek ampitheater.
- I wonder if there is any criticism that praises the device. The article all seems to lend itself towards the negative aspects while admitting that some of the most famous playwrights ever relied heavily upon it. Do any scholars praise the device?
- I'm not sure what the Nietzsche references are. Is that book cited somewhere and I can't find it? Maybe I'm missing something.
Really wonderful work. Congratulations. OrangeZabbo (talk) 15:39, 16 November 2014 (UTC)