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Did It Again (Kylie Minogue song)

I've listed this article for peer review because I believe this article is close to achieving a Feature article promotion. The article has been reviewed three times for a Good article banner, finally achieving it on the third try. I have submitted the article for a Feature article nomination but it has currently been viewed as an oppose than a support factor. I would like some assistance to improve the article from GA to FAC.

Thanks, CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 01:44, 20 September 2015 (UTC)

Comments from Friekorp
I remember the first time I saw the music video for this song on Video Hits as a child; I've loved it ever since so i'm happy to start a review of it. While I have 5 successful FAC's, be advised I've never taken a song article to FAC before. I've actually only recently got my first song article to GA, and currently also have it nominated for peer review (see here) with the hopes of taking it to FAC, so I guess we're both in the same boat there, anyway...

• "in different outfits, and fighting with each other" – pretty sure this would be better if simplified to "in different outfits fighting with each other"
• "In 1997, the British media reported that she" – i'd replace "she" with "Minogue", as it's the first time she is referred to in the body, the perhaps reword the next sentence if it doesn't read well referring to her as "Minogue" again so soon.
• "She had begun writing the song whilst British tabloids published rumors about her private life" – are these the same rumours mentioned earlier of different ones? Clarify.
• "However, she re-wrote the original lyrics with Anderson and Seaman" – This is the first time you mention them in the body, so give their full names and wikilink
• ""Real World, Sarm West and DMC Studios" – can you wikilink any (or all) of them?
• "The characters were Sex Kylie, Cute Kylie, Indie Kylie and Dance Kylie" – The characters names are already mentioned, I don't think you have to mention them again.
• "represented herself than the other three characters" – should that say "represented herself more than the other three characters"
• "Although Minogue said that "Indie Kylie" was the winner of fight," – I think you should delete all of this, and just begin the sentence with "Minogue felt "Cute Kylie" represented...", as you repeat the information that "Minogue said that Indie Kylie was the winner" later on
• "Minogue said that Indie Kylie was the winner" – in what way was she the winner? Just in Kylie's view or actually in the music video? Clarify this to the reader.
• "American website BuzzFeed hosted a poll" – When?
• "During an interview Minogue gave to Jetstar Airways" – Since this interview was so long after the song was released I think you should add the year of the interview to the prose.
• Why don't you add an audio clip of the song to the article?
• I thoroughly recommend requesting a copyedit at the Guild of Copy Editors before taking any article to FAC

Hope this helps. Ping me if you have any queries. Freikorp (talk) 12:15, 7 October 2015 (UTC)

Comments from Efe

• There seems to be an imbalance between the song's development and the song's music video, which is comprised of three huge sections. The availability of such information may be attributed to the fact the the video was in itself popular. But, the information on the song's creation seems to be lacking for FA purposes, really. --Efe (talk) 14:51, 31 October 2015 (UTC)
• Notwithstanding the three lines found on the second section which were culled from the CD booklet. Speaking of which, it is used as an inline citation for the fact that the song is of pop genre. Do liner notes contain such information? --Efe (talk) 14:51, 31 October 2015 (UTC)