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Eros Ramazzotti

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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to promote it to "B" status. I have contributed to the article significantly ever since I discovered it here on Wikipedia. I have once posted this very article for Peer Review about a year ago; however, it was not yet ready for "B" rating as it needed numerous improvements. Since then I have made lots of changes to the article to meet the certain criteria.

Thanks, Harout72 (talk) 04:25, 27 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: I don't do music article assessments, so I will just review this as if it were aiming for GA. There is a lot of information here, but the article needs some work to better follow the WP:MOS so here are some suggestions for improvement.

Per WP:CITE references come AFTER punctuation without a space, and are usually at the end of a sentence or phrase - so fix things like Ramazzotti has sold over 40 million records in his 25 years of career [3].
Done.--Harout72 (talk) 04:46, 9 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
This also has a fair number of placess where a copy edit could polish the language - for example the sentence quoted above would read better as something like Ramazzotti has sold over 40 million records in his 25-year career.[3]
The article has a lot of short (one or two sentence) paragraphs, which impedes the flow of the article. These should be combined with other paragraphs, or perhaps expanded.
Done.--Harout72 (talk) 06:14, 12 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Although much of the article has refs, there are a few places that need refs, for example In the course of the international tour for Stilelibero, Ramazzotti also appeared in eastern European countries including Moscow, Russia where he gave three-day sold out concerts at Kremlin Palace. Throughout his career, Ramazzotti has done duets with some very well-known artists such as Cher, Andrea Bocelli, Joe Cocker, Carlos Santana, Tina Turner, Anastacia, Luciano Pavarotti, and Laura Pausini. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
Done.--Harout72 (talk) 04:46, 9 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
Done.--Harout72 (talk) 05:25, 9 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I am not sure if the refs used all meet WP:RS - looking online it appears that there are some English books on Eros, though many are out of print now. I would also see what is in his autobiography.
Would it make sense to give English translations of the names of his songs and albums? This is the English Wikipedia.
Done.--Harout72 (talk) 04:46, 9 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 02:23, 7 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]