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FN Five-seven

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I have been working toward Featured Article status, so any feedback is appreciated. ROG5728 (talk) 01:45, 15 August 2010 (UTC)

Resident Mario

Very nice article, interesting read. Tisk, not much to say :) ResMar 12:27, 22 August 2010 (UTC)

Lead

• ...is a semi-automatic pistol designed and manufactured by FN Herstal in Belgium. In or of? If not all of the pistols are manufactured in Belgium, of would be more appropriate.
  • All Five-seven pistols are manufactured in Belgium and imported. ROG5728 (talk) 01:45, 24 August 2010 (UTC)

History

• ...The Five-seven pistol's 5.7x28mm cartridge was originally developed by FN Herstal in the 1990s alongside the pistol and the FN P90 personal defense weapon. Alongside what pistol? If you mean the titular Five-seven you should indicate it by name.
  • Done. ROG5728 (talk) 01:45, 24 August 2010 (UTC)
• In 1993, Jean-Louis Gathoye of FN filed a United States patent for a delayed blowback system intended for the Five-seven. How neccessary is United States in this sentance?
  • Neither necessary or unnecessary. I don't see any reason to remove it. ROG5728 (talk) 01:45, 24 August 2010 (UTC)

Ok. ResMar 16:16, 24 August 2010 (UTC)

Controversy

• According to the ATF, the Five-seven is one of the weapons favored by drug cartels in the Mexican Drug War, and smuggled Five-seven pistols can sell for $2,600 to $5,000 in Mexico. Should the numbers be converted to pesos?
  • The Five-seven's price in the infobox is only given in dollars, so giving this second number in pesos would probably be unnecessarily confusing. In addition, the source only mentions the price in dollars. ROG5728 (talk) 01:45, 24 August 2010 (UTC)

Valid enough. ResMar 16:16, 24 August 2010 (UTC)

• Later in the month, a number of gun control organizations such as the Brady Campaign wrote a collaborative letter to U.S. President Barack Obama, citing the weapon's reported use by the Fort Hood shooter and Mexican drug cartels, and calling on him to ban importation of the Five-seven pistol and 5.7x28mm ammunition. What came of this? ResMar 13:19, 22 August 2010 (UTC)
  • Nothing at this point, but no sources exist yet that actually say nothing has happened of it. ROG5728 (talk) 01:45, 24 August 2010 (UTC)

Perhaps then you should add a sentance that it's an ongoing issue? ResMar 16:16, 24 August 2010 (UTC)

Users

• In 2009, the National Rifle Association added the Five-seven to its NRA Tactical Police Competition standards, allowing law enforcement agencies to compete in the event using either weapon. Either weapon? What's the other one?
  • Fixed this error. ROG5728 (talk) 01:45, 24 August 2010 (UTC)

Btw: I like your work on the P90. ResMar 16:17, 24 August 2010 (UTC)