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Flag of Azerbaijan

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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to further improve it for later nomination for FAC. I would rather deal with any doubts, questions, errors, or omissions here than at FAC, so additional feedback and recommendations are welcome.

Thanks, Neftchi (talk) 08:57, 30 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Parutakupiu:

The infobox display the flag's use as a civil and state flag and ensign, but the lead text then says it's also used as war flag, naval ensign and jack.
The lead intro should not be over-descriptive about the flag (e.g. color shades), since that can be elaborated on the rest of the article; on the other hand, very little is mentioned about the flag's history and evolution, which is better developed on other sections.
The prose on the symbolism section has to be improved.
Why the hyphen in "the red color-its intention..." and "the green strip-its relation..."?
What is ADR? Please specify.
"The national flag of the Azerbaijan consists..." The "the" appears to be lost in here.
Seems to me that the design section should come before the symbolism, so you can describe first the flag and then the meaning of each element.
It would be better to follow the flag's evolution stages if you showed them within the sections that are describing them, instead of all being clumped up in one section.
The section on the independence needs a desperate prose overhaul.
Employ bullet list to enumerate the places where the flag should be raised, as it gets very messy to read them in one block of text.

— Parutakupiu (talk) 00:58, 5 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your feedback, this is very helpful.

Infobox is adjusted accordingly
Changed lead
Fixed the hypened text on red and green colors.
specified ADR in every section.
Corrected the "the" in the constitution.
Placed design above symbolism.

I will work on the remaining points. Neftchi (talk) 21:28, 5 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Zscout370 made the remaining adjustments. He fixed the broken English in the sections and removed the gallery. Neftchi (talk) 16:42, 6 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the assistance on the lead Parutakupiu, I very much appreciate it. Neftchi (talk) 21:28, 7 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]