Wikipedia:Peer review/Free Corps (Shannara)/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to discover what else could be done with this page, if anything (improvements, mergers, etc.)----or one of the other Shannara articles...Thanks for any help!!!!
- Also, is the placement of the {{Shannara character}} infobox right? (If it is higher, it makes the {{cquote}} abnormally long.)
- Lastly, is it even possible to get this to FA-class? (notability issues, etc.)
- Finally, see the merged article!! Right here. Please review the entire article if possible...
the_ed17 15:53, 31 March 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: First off, this review is of the whole article Border Legion (Shannara). Good start, but needs a lot of work to get to GA, with FA even further off (though not impossible, just a lot of work). I am not familiar with the Shannara books, so I am a good jargon detector. Here are some suggestions for improvement:
- The lead is currently one sentence and needs to be expanded to summarize the whole article - see WP:LEAD.
- I also note that the lead refers to Callahorn's army, but does not identify it - I assumed it was a war leader / general until I clicked on the link and found it is a fictional country. This raises three important points:
- Provide context for the reader - assume they know nothing but want to learn more. Here explaining that Callahorn is the fictional country would help. See WP:PCR
- Not quite the case here, but still try to avoid jargon or if it is required, make sure you explain it. See WP:JARGON
- Most importantly since this is about a fictional subject, write from an out of unvierse perspective. See WP:IN-U. This is already done in some places (identifying it as in a novel in the lead) but needs to be done consistently throughout, especially for GA and FA.
- References follow puctuation and are usually at the end of a sentence - see WP:CITE Do not have a space between a period and the ref or between refs, and keep refs in numerical order.
- The references themselves will need the most work and may the most difficult part to find. Currently all of the refs are to the books themselves or to a few websites. This article needs to have independent third-party sources that are about the books and the role of the Border Legion / Free Corps within them. There needs to be independent critical discussion of the books and these units. See WP:RS for reliable sources - not sure the websites listed are reliable in this sense of the word. See also WP:V.
- Be very careful to back up all remarks with verifiable, reliable sources, otherwise this risks being labeled original reseaarch and will never make GA or FA (and may be deleted).
- Watch out for POV language - see WP:NPOV. See Stee Jans was one of the pitifully few members of the Free Corps to survive the War of the Forbidding. [40] pitifully few is POV
- Internet refs need at least url, title, publisher, author (if known) and date accessed.
- I would try to find a model article that is already FA on a similar topic and use that as a guide to follow. It may be easier to write an article on one of the books first, then if you finsd sources, on the military units within the book(s).
Hope this helps, sounds like these are very exciting books to read, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 21:41, 2 April 2008 (UTC)