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I've listed this article for peer review because I believe that this could be a GA, but I wanted other opinions before I did this, so that I would know what to do to improve this article to reach that stage. If you find anything that can be improved mention it here.

Thanks, DeMoN2009 15:55, 27 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Various comments:

At the moment, the article has lots about the rules, but less material about other aspects. The big brother of this article. association football, is a featured article and gives an example of a good balance between sections about rules, history, competitions etc.
The first paragraph of the History section is straight plagiarism of the reference cited.
The very first thing mentioned in the body of the article should be that futsal is a variant of football, as everything else follows from there
Why are there big black lines in the tables?
Actually, the tables probably shouldn't be there at all. A prose section like the "International competitions" section in association football would be better.
Practically none of the many external links ought to be there. The first one has a whiff of spam, and many of the others aren't in English or aren't particularly useful. Take a look at Wikipedia:External links for guidance and then take an axe to the section.
Nearly all the references are to the rules from the FIFA website. More diversity in sourcing would be beneficial.
What makes http://roonba.50webs.com/futsalrankingswor.htm a reliable source?
- Maybe its not a reliable source, but for the moment its the only Ranking that updates after each game, we can rely on it untill FIFA proved us with an Offical Ranking --Nael615 (talk) 07:08, 15 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
There is very little about the relative popularity / unpopularity of futsal. For instance, except in passing no mention is made that it is more popular in Latin countries than elsewhere, nor that it is hardly played at all in Northern Europe even though it is a football heartland. How many people play futsal? How many people watch it? What media coverage does it get? How does it differ from standard football?
Indoor soccer is not futsal. While the differences between futsal and other indoor variants might be discussed in a section somewhere, there is no reason to do so in the lead.
Boring MOS stuff: Number ranges should use endashes, not hyphens; conversions of units of measurement between metric and imperial should generally be provided, and units should be separated by a non-breaking space (WP:UNITS).

Hope this helps. Oldelpaso (talk) 08:45, 28 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. I have changed the history section, and will try and improve the article using the other suggestions. DeMoN2009 15:01, 28 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]