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Germanicus

I'm interested in any ideas for improving this article. Later on I'm hoping for Good Article status, and obviously it's not there yet. I'm particularly interested in the sections after his death and ideas on how to expand/condense them. I don't usually submit articles for review, but I appreciate the feedback. Psychotic Spartan 123 09:02, 26 February 2017 (UTC)

Thanks, Psychotic Spartan 123 09:02, 26 February 2017 (UTC)

Comments by Hawkeye7

I don't think this article is far off Good Article status. Comments are in random-ish order.

• Can we have some information about what the coins were
  • Will add info on coins tomorrow.
• Shouldn't the agnomen go at the end of his name?
  • I added a note explaining why agnomen ended up at the front of his name (in short - bc he was adopted)
• "Upon his adoption into the Julii, his brother Claudius" It becomes unclear whether "his" refers to Claudius or Germanicus. Sugest replacing with "Germanicus"
  • Done
• Germanicus' name changes. I've read this part through several times and cannot figure it out. Was the change of Germanicus' name as a result of Tiberius' adoption by Augustus, or by Germanicus' adoption by Tiberius? (ie which order did the events occur in?)
  • Clarified - his name changed as a result of his adoption by Tiberius, who couldn't adopt him until he himself was adopted by Augustus.
• "He was a favorite of his great-uncle" You have to say "Germanicus"
  • Done
• We really need to clarify that his father is conventionally called "Drusus" and his uncle "Tiberius".
  • Done - clarified his father as Drusus, and Tiberius is the Tiberius in the article (only other Tiberius in the article is clarified as a distinct person).
• You don't need to link Tiberius more than once.
  • Fixed - delinked all but first instance of Tiberius' name
• "Through Agrippina the Younger, Germanicus was a maternal grandfather of the emperor Nero" This is the second time you've told us this. Suggest deleting either this or the one in the second paragraph of the section.
  • Deleted.
• "(2nd, 13th, 16th, and 14th legions" Capitalise "Legion" Consider putting the legions inb their more normal form, as in the article titrles, with Roman numerals and titles (since the numbers were not unique)
  • Done.
• Interrum: link "consul"
  • Done.
• What is an interrum anyway?
  • Latin for interim - fixed.
• "it had violated an order by Augustus where no senator shall enter the province without consulting the emperor" Suggest "that" instead of "where"
  • Done.
• "Germanicus' grandson was Emperor Nero who died in 68 and was the last of the Julio-Claudian dynasty." This is the third time we've been told this, and it needs a reference. Suggest deleting the sentence.
  • Done.
• Suggest moving the image in "Post mortem" across to the left.
  • Done.
• Historiography. I was sort of expecting some details about how non-Ancient historians have treated Germanicus.
  • Expanded historiography to include non-Ancient historians and Suetonius as well.
• Germanicus in historical fiction. The paragraph on the bronze statue doesn't belong here.
  • Removed from section.
• The Photo gallery doesn't contribute anything to the article. Suggest deleting it.
  • Done.

Hope this helps. Hawkeye7 (talk) 06:08, 12 March 2017 (UTC)

• I appreciate the feedback. I'll see what I can do. Psychotic Spartan 123 08:34, 12 March 2017 (UTC)

  Good luck at GA. Consider nominating for A class. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:46, 12 March 2017 (UTC)