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Giant anteater

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I've listed this article for peer review because it has just passed GA and I hope to make it my next FAC. An peer review might make it more likely to pass.

Thanks, LittleJerry (talk) 23:27, 28 June 2012 (UTC)

Some quick opening thoughts- I'm too tired to do justice to the whole thing. J Milburn (talk) 22:30, 6 July 2012 (UTC)

• "The giant anteater is grouped with the semi-arboreal northern and southern tamandua in the family Myrmecophagidae, which in turn is grouped with the family Cyclopedidae, whose only extant member is the arboreal silky anteater, in the suborder Vermilingua." I'm assuming that this is covered by the next reference, but could that be confirmed with a footnote, please?

Will look. LittleJerry (talk) 23:42, 6 July 2012 (UTC)

Done. LittleJerry (talk) 03:52, 7 July 2012 (UTC)

• Paragraph three of the taxonomy section feels like it wanders off-topic a little.

I don't understand? LittleJerry (talk) 23:42, 6 July 2012 (UTC)

• The eras with descriptors seem to use unwarranted caps- ("Late Pleistocene and Early Holocene", for instance)

Fixed. LittleJerry (talk) 23:42, 6 July 2012 (UTC)

• You rely heavily on this source; how reliable is this? It doesn't look great for a featured article.

The amount and quailty of information it contains and sources it uses. Maybe your right. I'll look for a better source.

LittleJerry (talk) 23:42, 6 July 2012 (UTC)

Here some information on the author. LittleJerry (talk) 03:23, 7 July 2012 (UTC)

• File:Uc irvine8300029.jpg is almost certainly non-free.

Replaced. LittleJerry (talk) 23:42, 6 July 2012 (UTC)

Comments by Cryptic C62

• Some of the section titles are a bit wonky. I've never seen the phrase Life history in the context of taxonomy (or any other subject, for that matter). What about "ecology"? I assume that Activies is supposed to be "Activities", but even this is not a particularly clear description of the section's contents.

Changed "life history" to "ecology". What do you suggest for a new name for "Activities"? LittleJerry (talk) 17:44, 20 July 2012 (UTC)

Well, the subsection doesn't seem to really focus on any particular type of behavior, it's just Behavior minus Spacing, Foraging, and Reproduction. Perhaps this section shouldn't be a subsection at all, but should instead serve as the first few paragraphs of the Behavior section.

Done. LittleJerry (talk) 23:05, 25 July 2012 (UTC)

• The last paragraph in Distribution and status is problematic. It's too short to exist as its own paragraph, and new paragraphs should not begin with transition words such as "however". I suggest either merging this with the previous paragraph, or expanding it and removing "however".

Done LittleJerry (talk) 17:44, 20 July 2012 (UTC)

• "As of 2010, the total population had declined by 30 percent over the past ten years." Do we have any stats or estimates on how many anteaters were alive in 2000 and 2010? I think that would be more informative than the percent difference. Also, if such numbers aren't available, a much more natural phrasing would be: "Between 2000 and 2010, the total population had declined by 30 percent."

Couldn't find any stats so changed to suggested sentence. LittleJerry (talk) 23:05, 25 July 2012 (UTC)

• "Giant anteaters live in home ranges" What is a home range? A link or short description would be useful.

Linked. LittleJerry (talk) 23:05, 25 July 2012 (UTC)

• "In other parts of Brazil, anteaters may need at least 9 km²" In what sense do these animals "need" this much space?

Fixed. LittleJerry (talk) 23:05, 25 July 2012 (UTC)

• In the first paragraph of Reproduction, there are three consecutive sentences that start with "During". I suggest finding alternative phrasings to avoid confusion.

Fixed. LittleJerry (talk) 18:27, 28 July 2012 (UTC)

• "They have survived up to 16 years in captivity." Why is this in the Reproduction subsection?

Moved. LittleJerry (talk) 18:27, 28 July 2012 (UTC)

• There may not be anything in the literature which can answer this, but one question that is not addressed in Reproduction: How many pups does a mother raise in her lifetime?

Will check. LittleJerry (talk) 18:27, 28 July 2012 (UTC)

Not found. LittleJerry (talk) 20:49, 29 July 2012 (UTC)

• Also, how large are the pups when they are first born?

Will check. LittleJerry (talk) 18:27, 28 July 2012 (UTC)

Added. LittleJerry (talk) 20:49, 29 July 2012 (UTC)

• "In the mythology and folklore of the Amazon Basin" Shouldn't this mention the people of the Amazon Basin? Perhaps this is what was meant: "In the mythology and folklore of the indigenous peoples of the Amazon Basin".

Added. LittleJerry (talk) 00:51, 1 August 2012 (UTC)

• "particularly in a Yarabar myth" I'm not seeing anything on Wikipedia or Google that mentions the Yarabar people. I suggest reviewing the source to make sure that this is spelled correctly.

Fixed. LittleJerry (talk) 00:51, 1 August 2012 (UTC)

• "The Kayapo people have masks ... during naming and initiation ceremonies." This should probably say one of the following:
  • "The Kayapo people wear masks ...during naming and initiation ceremonies."
  • "The Kayapo people have masks ... which they wear during naming and initiation ceremonies".

Fixed. LittleJerry (talk) 00:51, 1 August 2012 (UTC)

• "Released during the Phoney War, the film may have referenced France’s Maginot Line." Was this a reference or an allusion? There's a difference.

Fixed. LittleJerry (talk) 00:51, 1 August 2012 (UTC)

• "The Flash cartoon Happy Tree Friends features a nerdy blue-gray anteater named Sniffles." Citation?

I don't think the existence of a cartoon character on a show with its own wiki article needs a cite but I removed the "nerdy blue-gray" part. LittleJerry (talk) 00:51, 1 August 2012 (UTC)

More to come. --Cryptic C62 · Talk 16:23, 20 July 2012 (UTC)