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The sentence Their architecture and music encompass some of the notable contributions to India and the world needs citations from reputed books on architecture. I read the section on "Architecture" at the bottom and see blog cites are used for reference. Also, you can't use an image as a citation. Blogs are best avoided unless it supports a book source.
The very first section after the lead, "Ethnic identity", is sourced from blog sites which is not the best place to source from. One citation referes back to another wiki page and this is considered "circular reasoning". There must be some good books to source from.
The Kadambas mentioned here are the Kadambas of Goa (10th century-1340CE), a later day branch of the Kadambas of Karnataka (4th-6th century). Yes, you are right in writing that the Kadambas were Kannadigas. Even the Goan Kadambas minted coins with Kannada legends and inscribed inscriptions in Kannada language.
The sentence Goa was ruled by the Muslims for about 60 years before they were removed by Harihara I, of Vijayanagar Empire. is a repeat sentence.
Is this sentence encyclopaedic? was in these districts that the Portuguese undertook their most zealous efforts to convert the local [pagans] to Christianity.
The history section in general is poorly cited.
In the "Geographic distribution" section, the word "many" has been used atleast 6 times. Needs a re-write.

In the section "Language and Literature", the sentences Goan Catholics have strong feelings towards the Konkani language. This love and affection for their language can be seen when most of the Goans united and fought for Konkani as their mother tongue. needs a citation. While I am sure this claim is accurate, there must be numerous sources that mention Goan struggle to make Konkani the state language. So a citation should be easy to find.
The sentence Today Goan Catholics have all strata of the society conversing in English and in fact taking pride in the same contradicts the above sentence on Konkani pride.
Ambigous sentence-Goan Catholics have another set of people who are pursuing this language just for the love for it. Who are another set of people?
Unclear sentence The first book in Konkani and any Indian language was
I suggest you refer to a book such as these which give plenty of info on Konkani literature.

Various (1987) [1987]. Encyclopaedia of Indian literature - vol1. Sahitya Akademi. ISBN 8126018038.
Various (1988) [1988]. Encyclopaedia of Indian literature - vol2. Sahitya Akademi. ISBN 8126011947.
Various (1996). Encyclopaedia of Indian literature - vol 5. Sahitya Akademi. ISBN 8126012218.

When you write Other [forms] of their literature..., you should be focussing on metres and genres, not specific book titles, OR just remove "forms" are mention important writings.
This sentence is UNDUE and does not sound encyclopaedic-However, the relations between the upper castes and lower castes among the Goan Catholic community continues to remain strained in some parts of Goa. For instance.... Too much weightage for a news paper article and too much coverage in this article. There must be other interesting things to write about the various sections of society.

Everthing done in accordance to Dineshkannambadi's comments.Sanfy ^T.