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Grammy Award for Best Metal Performance

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I've listed this article for peer review because… I want to know how this list should be expanded, what should I write? And the tables?

Thanks, Canniba loki 16:36, 2 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Brianboulton comments: What the article most lacks is a proper lead. Have you looked at featured lists of music awards (per WP:FL) to see the kind of information included in their leads?

In this case, the lead should at least say who is responsible for the Grammy awards. No prior knowledge should be assumed.

I expanded the text a bit, what do you think?--Canniba loki 23:36, 16 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The lead should also provide a brief commentary on the 20 years of the award; for example some of the information in your "Category facts" section should be textualised.

I did, but I think it can be better.--Canniba loki 23:36, 16 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The sentence beginning "Years reflect the year in which..." should be a footnote linked to the tables rather than a sentence in the lead. The citation for this fact should be properly formatted, not left as a bare link.

I think this sentence can be arranged as an introduction text to the tables (I had this idea after your comments).--Canniba loki 23:36, 16 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Has there been no press or magazine comments over the years, on these awards? These could provide useful sources for facts incorporated into the lead.

I added a bit.--Canniba loki 23:36, 16 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The tables look neat, but there is some confusion with the sources. Your main source seems to suffer from a mix-up over years. For example, it repeats 2006 information in 2007, which casts doubt on its factual reliabilty. Since most of the information comes from this source, this is a potential problem.

~~Can I use rockonthenet.com as a general source?--Canniba loki 23:36, 16 December 2009 (UTC)~~[reply]

I can't find what your source is for the 1989 data, where Jethro Tull is indicated as the winner.
As to whether the information on the tables can be expanded, the only thing I can think of is to indicate the albums from which the award tracks are taken. Would that be useful information?

Yes, I added ("track from?").--Canniba loki 23:36, 16 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I hope the above is of some use to you. I am not able to watch my peer reviews at the moment, but if you want to raise anything with me, please call my talkpage. Brianboulton (talk) 00:35, 8 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]