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HMS Roebuck (1774)

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I have nominated this article for Peer Review because I'm hoping to take to Featured Article status. Any ideas on how to improve it further would be appreciated. Thanks, Ykraps (talk) 06:15, 15 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from AustralianRupert: G'day, this article looks pretty good to me. I have a couple of minor comments/suggestions: AustralianRupert (talk) 08:42, 18 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

in the Construction and armament section, this sentence needs a citation: Launched on 24 April 1774 and completed by 4 August 1775, Roebuck cost £18,911.0.6d plus a further £1,749.5.5d for fitting.
Done. Referenced by Winfield. I think it got lost when I broke the section into paragraphs.
move the link for North America from the American Revolutionary War section to its first mention in the Construction section
Done.
in the References, is there an OCLC number for Jones et al 1811?
Done.
in the References, is there a place of publication for the Winfield 2007 work?
Done.
Thanks AustralianRupert for pointing out those small but very important details. It's those sort of silly things I'm always overlooking. Best regards --Ykraps (talk) 20:27, 18 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
No worries. Great work with the article, all the best for taking it further. Before going to FAC, if you list the article at MILHIST ACR it should help to tease out a few more aspects to tweak. Good luck! Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 01:21, 19 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
I'll leave open here for a few more days to see if anyone else comments, then do that. Thanks--Ykraps (talk) 06:25, 20 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

CaptainEek's take on this nautical matter "I'm a Captain, don't you think I know how Boats work?!"

For the prize ships column (nicely put together!), if possible, you should try to WikiLink the names of the ships taken. Also, a wikilink for "Hollandsch Diep", or some further explanation if possible.
Hollands Diep is already linked in the main text but I'm not against linking it again in the table if you think it's helpful. I'll have a look to see how many more ship names I can link but again I think the more notable prizes are linked in the main text.--Ykraps (talk) 12:25, 22 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I found links for two Dutch ships but the rest of prizes are already linked in the main text if an article exists.--Ykraps (talk) 09:23, 29 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
The description of Captain Hamonds familiarity as "exceptional" seems like a peacocking term to me. What does the source say on the matter?
The source says exceptional which is partly why I chose to use the term. I'm not sure I see it as peacock term however, to me it simply means greater than normal so Hamond's knowledge was better than one would usually expect. We could say 'superior' knowledge or 'uncommonly good' perhaps?--Ykraps (talk) 12:25, 22 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
To get it to featured, more relevant images wouldn't hurt. But be careful not to just add images for decoration. Illustrated by pictures where possible is the goal. Perhaps pictures of her most notable captains, of sister ships, notable prize ships, notable docking points, that sort of thing.
Thanks. I hadn't thought about notable prize ships. I'll have another look on commons a bit later.--Ykraps (talk) 12:25, 22 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for that suggestion. I found an image of Confederacy and added another of the Dutch fleet in the Vlieter roadstead so almost every section is now illustrated.--Ykraps (talk) 09:23, 29 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
I polished up the grammar and fixed some Wikilinking. I would try to go through and see where you could unlink some things, its close to being overlinked. Also make sure things link to the "right" thing, for instance there was a link to the town of Sheerness, but it should have been a link to Sheerness Dockyards (I've already fixed it, but just try to make sure the links are right.)
Thank you. I'll have another look at the linking (there ought to be a tool for that) although I do like to repeat links from the lead (which I believe is acceptable practice).--Ykraps (talk) 12:25, 22 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I've managed to find and remove a few more and also linked Deptford to Deptford Dockyard.--Ykraps (talk) 09:23, 29 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

All in all, a very good article, and should be ready for FA soon with some more polish. Captain Eek ^{Edits Ho Cap'n!}⚓ 07:50, 22 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]