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Hafez al-Assad

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to see it reach GA status. Also I need few advices on how to organize the article. The "Presidency" section seems messy.

Thanks, Wustenfuchs 21:18, 12 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Hey there Wustenfuchs, I've given your article a read through, and have a few comments that I hope may be of benefit. Firstly, it's certainly a good and balanced article, for which you deserve to be congratulated. I personally think that there are a few changes that would improve it, and would give it a better chance at GA status review, but that's not to denigrate it as it currently stands. If I may be so bold, I'd like to highlight the ongoing work I've been doing over at Vladimir Lenin and – perhaps more relevantly – Fidel Castro, that you might like to look over, which might offer some examples for potential improvement here.

While I applaud your use of referencing, I think that you could make greater use of sources; for instance, for most statements, you only link to one reference, but it would strengthen the article if you often referenced to two of more sources instead, as I have done over at the Lenin and Castro articles. Are there any key sources – such as biographies about Assad – that you could have used but haven't, particularly in fleshing out sections such as that about his early life? If so, I really suggest that you obtain a copy and flesh out the article in this manner, which could certainly do with expansion in certain sections, such as that dealing with his early life and death.

I think that the introduction could also do with a rewrite, or at least a re-organize, along the same lines as the Castro article. On a slightly pedantic note, you also refer to "Great Britain" when the correct term would be "United Kingdom." I hope that these tips are of some use, as otherwise you have a pretty good article on your hands. Best. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:16, 14 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your review, it's useful. I'll add more sources where ever possible and try to find a book dealing with his biography. I also think that the Fidel Castro article is a very good model for this one. --Wustenfuchs 18:07, 15 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

No worries. If I can ever be of help again, don't hesitate to contact me on my user page. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:16, 15 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

One somewhat important detail missing is that one of the reasons Hafez Assad was accepted as president was that Musa Sadr recognised Alawites as true Muslims in a fatwa, apparently on request from Hafez Assad himself. FunkMonk (talk) 11:08, 30 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]