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Hans-Ulrich Rudel

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I've listed this article for peer review because Rudel is one of the more controversial and difficult figures of World War II to write about. His actions as pilot have been exploited by the Nazi propaganda, his fame as Germany's most highly decorated soldier and his involvement in post World War II Neo-Nazi activities, him protecting known war criminals, weapons dealing in Latin America, and his ambitions in politics, require the effort of more than one editor. I want to avoid that I fall into the trap of misrepresenting his actions. I am aware that the article still has some white spots which I need to dig in to. Nevertheless I would appreciate any feedback you may have. Thanks for your time and attention. Cheers MisterBee1966 (talk) 15:25, 6 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comments. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. - Dank (push to talk)

" He was then posted to the Luftwaffe main testing ground at Rechlin experimenting with the Bordkanone BK 3,7 equipped Ju 87 G use in the anti-tank role.": I don't follow.
"III. Gruppe": Most readers are going to read the period as the end of the sentence when their eye gets to this point, because the III is separated from Gruppe in 3 ways: by the link, the font, and the period.
Comments: As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. I've copyedited down to Early life and career and skimmed the rest. Well done. - Dank (push to talk) 19:58, 10 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, for your constructive feedback. Cheers MisterBee1966 (talk) 15:00, 11 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comments: G'day, I did some copy editing also. These are my edits: [1]. One suggestion that I have is to split the rather long second paragraph of the lead. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 13:38, 15 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comments: Great article-really enjoyed reading it. However, the first two sentences of the section Defeat on the Eastern Front aren't clear to me - in the sense that I could not figure out how to best correct them. Rudel was trying to defend 8. Armee, I am pretty sure, but that's not how it reads. Also, I think the word being needs to be inserted in front of encircled in the 2nd sentence of that section, but I wanted to leave that up to you. Thank you! --Concertmusic (talk) 21:00, 28 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, reworded the sentences. Cheers MisterBee1966 (talk) 08:09, 29 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]