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Heather Chasen

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I've listed this article for peer review because from this peer review I am hoping to be able to cleanup the article to a high standard, aswell as being able to further nominate for FA. I would also like to confirm whether the article is at the standard I think it is. Thanks, Mayhem Mario 16:44, 13 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Lead could be a bit longer, maybe two paras.
What precisely cites her birth date?
Don't link common terms link England.
Don't over link terms like soap opera.
" She was in the..." "was in" reads clumsily to me, appeared in?
"(who had pulled out of the role for personal reasons)" not really necessary in the lead.
Explain what RADA means before you just use the abbreviation.
Regents Park is actually Regent's Park.
"Chasen had a relationship with Amanda Barrie although has never spoken about this" if you believe this to be true and cites back it up then consider LGBT cats.
No need to link London.
" received nice fan mail" reads a little weakly to me.
"and Norman Simmonds " ->" and Norman Simmonds'"
" for the 14th June episode" remove "th" from 14th.
"other TV programmes" -> television
Z Cars is Z-Cars.
What is "the BAC"?
"was nominated for the Tony Award " when?
1 Episode -> 1 episode (etc)
Make sure data tables comply with MOS:DTT for col and row scopes to enable screen readers to make the most of these lists.
1959–77 vs 1966–1968 be consistent with date range formats.
Ref 19, what does " 32. 30-5 August 2011." mean?
Is it BBC or BBC?
Ref 5- "Retrieved 25June 2011." space needed.
Ref 5- it's The Daily Telegraph.

Done all — M.Mario (T/C) 14:31, 31 July 2012 (UTC) The Rambling Man (talk) 19:45, 2 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]