Wikipedia:Peer review/Henry Golden Dearth/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because this article was created recently. It needs formatting and clean-up.
Thanks, Bachfanwang (talk) 12:32, 28 October 2008 (UTC)
- It's looking ok so far. The lead needs expanding, per WP:LEAD. Could anything else be added to his biography? Often articles will have an Early life, Career, Later life etc section. – How do you turn this on (talk) 18:09, 6 November 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting article and nice artworks. Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement.
- Agree with the comments above - see WP:LEAD The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way
- The article links some things that should not be linked like years
- Affiliations and awards section has zero refs and needs some
- The external links for the poaintings in museum should be converted to refs - avoid dirtect external links
- What have critics said about him and his art? A Reception section is fairly standard for arts articles
- A model article is useful for ideas and example to follow - there are several FAs on artists that may be useful as models, for example Henry Moore or El Greco or these articles
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 02:23, 8 November 2008 (UTC)