Wikipedia:Peer review/Imagawa Yoshimoto/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because it's about an important historical figure and I'd like to see how it can be improved.
Thanks, Tadakuni (talk) 14:42, 12 July 2008 (UTC)
- A couple of minor points. The statement about some claiming Ujiteru was poisoned should be sourced. The reference to the 1915 Encyclopedia Britannica should be updated. Fg2 (talk) 02:20, 13 July 2008 (UTC)
- Thanks for the feedback. I removed the poisoning reference because "some say" doesn't make much difference-- he died "suddenly," either way. Also, the reference isn't to the 1915 Britannica, it's to a book the company published-- should that still be updated? -Tadakuni (talk) 06:44, 13 July 2008 (UTC)
- Taking out the mention of poisoning was for the better, although if someone finds an appropriate source it would be interesting to put back in. Regarding the EB source, thanks for pointing that out. I'd suggest finding something newer, and maybe a reviewer can suggest a source in English or Japanese. Works on Japanese history approaching a century old often turn out to be based on unreliable sources. But if nothing newer shows up, it might be a simple matter of rephrasing it along the lines of "some historians once accepted the figure of 40,000." Fg2 (talk) 08:02, 13 July 2008 (UTC)