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I have started working on this article using the Aang article as an example. Have made it less in-universe but it still needs work on things. Any suggestions would be greatly appreciated. I don't know how much I can do, but I will certainly try.

Thanks, Maximillion Pegasus (talk) 05:07, 26 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

"in episdoe 15 " - typo.
Image:Iroh ID BitterWork.png needs fair use rationale specific to the Iroh article.
"2005-2006" (in the infobox) should use the en-dash to separate the years.
Plot section could be merged a bit, seven short paragraphs is a little excessive.
"Undeterred, Zuko sought to do the impossible," what does this mean? Seems a strange way to introduce the plot.
"season 2" or "Season Two" (I prefer the latter) but be consistent.
Plot overview seems (to me at least) to change tense a few times...
WP:HEAD advises against The in section headings so "The Veteran" should be "Veteran".
"[21] [8] " - remove the space and order numerically.
Last two paras of Abilities section unreferenced.

That's all I have for now. Hope that helps! The Rambling Man (talk) 11:21, 28 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Yes. Thank you! I will try to get on that. Maximillion Pegasus (talk) 20:09, 28 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]