Wikipedia:Peer review/Jean Baptiste Point du Sable/archive1
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I developed this article to GA last year. I'm uncertain what else it needs before taking it to FAC.
Thanks, Jeremy (talk) 20:10, 1 September 2011 (UTC)
- Comments from Jappalang
I think it is a pretty good article thus far. I do have the following quibbles.
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"... is widely regarded as the first permanent resident of Chicago, Illinois."- This would be the summary of "He is therefore widely regarded as the first permanent resident of Chicago" in the Founder of Chicago section. The sentence is sourced to Pacyga 2009, p. 12, and The City of Chicago Official Website, both of which only (i.e. the source themselves) recognizes him as the first permanent resident, but which did not state "wide" recognition. Seeing how (from the article) that the status might be recent (how much opposition is there?), it might be more precise (and avoid any calls of bias) to say that "... is regarded by the city of Chicago, Illinois, as its first permanent resident."?
"In 1779, he was living on the site of present-day Michigan City, Indiana, when he was arrested by the British military on suspicion of being an American sympathizer."- To help readers less familiar with US history, an insertion about the state of affairs in the continent at that time should be inserted, ala "In 1779, the British colonists in North America were revolting against their overseas king and government. Point du Sable was arreseted ..."
I think this has a good chance at FAC, provided his status is not one that has a controversy not covered here. Jappalang (talk) 03:40, 7 September 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for your review. I like your suggestions. —Jeremy (talk) 08:18, 10 September 2011 (UTC)
- On looking at this, we have a few more citations in the 'Founder of Chicago' paragraph that place Point du Sable as the first permanent resident and/or founder of Chicago (Quaife 1933, Baumann 2005, Graham 1953). So I didn't want the lead to focus on one specific source—instead I just removed the word 'widely'. Although the article discusses people who visited the Chicago area before Point du Sable, I don't think that any of the cited sources (or any others that I have seen) dispute the first permanent resident status of Point du Sable, so I think that the amended version should be OK. To add context to the arrest as you suggested I thought that a link to the American Revolutionary War article might work, so I added that. Thanks—Jeremy (talk) 09:15, 10 September 2011 (UTC)
- Your changes work. Good luck! Jappalang (talk) 03:32, 13 September 2011 (UTC)
- On looking at this, we have a few more citations in the 'Founder of Chicago' paragraph that place Point du Sable as the first permanent resident and/or founder of Chicago (Quaife 1933, Baumann 2005, Graham 1953). So I didn't want the lead to focus on one specific source—instead I just removed the word 'widely'. Although the article discusses people who visited the Chicago area before Point du Sable, I don't think that any of the cited sources (or any others that I have seen) dispute the first permanent resident status of Point du Sable, so I think that the amended version should be OK. To add context to the arrest as you suggested I thought that a link to the American Revolutionary War article might work, so I added that. Thanks—Jeremy (talk) 09:15, 10 September 2011 (UTC)