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Jimmy Forrest (footballer)

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like other editors to review the article to see if it can be rated higher than "start class".

Thanks, Daemonic Kangaroo (talk) 19:29, 12 June 2008 (UTC)

Comments from Peanut4 (talk · contribs)

• "easy victories" may be true but it's POV without any reference.
  •  Done Scores added
• "Ironically, Scotland faced Wales in their last match in the 1884 British Home Championship on the day of the cup final and were forced to field a reserve eleven." I don't think this is relevant to Jimmy Forrest.
  •  Done Moved to footnote as interesting "aside"
• "excellent pass" as easy victories, it's POV without a reference.
  •  Done Reference added
• "brace" I know what it means, but it needs explaining, linking (note the previous page for brace has been deleted) or re-wording.
  •  Done Link to Brace (sports) added
• "England were disappointing". POV / needs reference.
  •  Done Reference added
• "Queen's Park were hoping to gain revenge for their defeat" I think this is a gimme, and doesn't really add anything.
  •  Done Re-worded
• I think some of the capitals need changing, e.g. Fifth Round, the Cup, the Cup Final.
  •  Done I've removed most of the offending capitals - if I've missed any, let me know.
• "exciting encounter with Accrington." It probably was but needs reference.
  •  Done Re-worded and reference added
• Page ranges for the references need endashes.
  •  Done Done
• Online references need accessdates.
  •  Done Done
• It needs a few more references generally.
  •  Done I've added some extra references e.g. relating to the foundation of the Football League. I'll give it a rest for now, and come back in a few days with a fresh look.

Think that's all for now, but it's a good start. Peanut4 (talk) 13:39, 14 June 2008 (UTC)

I removed the semi-automated peer review (SAPR) because it should not be included here for the following reasons: 1) when the SAPR is included here, this peer review request does not show up at WP:PR for others to see it and make comments; 2) this saves space at WP:PR; and 3) this follows the directions above, i.e. "Please do not include any images, such as done/not done templates with tick/cross graphics, and do not paste in semi-automated peer reviews below: link to them instead." Thanks, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 17:41, 25 June 2008 (UTC)