Wikipedia:Peer review/Kakha Kaladze/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I believe it has every notable event covered in the career of a very notable footballer. I believe that it can be a Good Article with a few minor touches.
Thanks, Spiderone (talk) 16:28, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
- Comments by Oldelpaso
- I wouldn't say every notable event of his career is covered, the pre-Milan part of his career is severely under-represented. Eight years in one paragraph. Dynamo Kiev were imperious domestically and made waves in European competition while Kaladze was there, so sources for that period shouldn't be an issue.
- A €280,000 fee was enough to take him to the Ukrainian Premier League and Dynamo Kyiv in January 1998. - the Euro didn't exist in 1998.
- FCs and ACs etc. are used inconsistently. Some clubs are referred to using them and others are not. If the intention is to use the full name on first reference, and then drop the FC on subsequent mentions, then double-checking is needed.
- Georgia, however, have never qualified for the FIFA World Cup or the UEFA European Championship while Kaladze has played. - the last part is redundant, they have never qualified full stop.
- Avoid easter egg links like rossoneri, particularly if the target article has already been linked.
- If the veracity of the Yushenko allegation is in any doubt, which seems to be the case, it should not be present in a BLP.
- Kaladze threatened to play for Ukraine instead of the Georgia national team - the ref mentions citizenship, which is entirely different. A player cannot represent two national teams.
- The layout of the article is a bit "Here is a fact about Kaladze. Here is another fact. Kaladze was involved in event x." - there's little joining it together. This is not an easy thing to remedy, reading aloud can sometimes help.
Hope this helps. Oldelpaso (talk) 14:02, 17 August 2009 (UTC)